I pity you and your rich lives
for who could want what you possess?
Your hearts are ran like bee hives
while on worldly things you obssess.
You walk so tall with your degrees
and shun people like me with none.
You think I should bow on my knees
as you spout all that you have done.
Yet for all your exprensive words
I see, no special air to you.
Took you a year to learn what I heard
and known, since I was but two.
For all your brains you have no sense
and all your soul you have no heart.
How I pity you behind your fence
because you tore yourself apart.
Comments
1 - 26 of 26
-
Bandits United!!!
This is an amazing poem, full of opinion in blatant beautiful form. The rhyme is brilliantly done. You show how easy it is to see a different side to the prominent
Sorry the bandit comment is so late
Shari
-
Bandits United
I liked the way you kept your intensity all the way through the poem. My favourite word was 'exprensive', at first I thought I was a mistake and then I got it. Cheers
-
BANDITS UNITED: This was your day in the spotlight - hope you enjoyed it. Used this background many times for my own poetry - like it. Fits well with this poem as well. Good rhythm, rhyme and flow to the lines of this poem. Just wonder about ran - could it be run in this case? Once a language teacher, always a language teacher. Take care...
-
Bandits United!
Oh, this is brilliant, I have felt this way so many times about those who think they a holier than Thou. Loved it!
Love & Light
Debbera
-
Bandits United!
I very much agree with the spirit of this poem; there are many things you just can't learn in school, and have to learn by living life. I think the rhyme really helps the flow of this piece, and gets your point across well without feeling forced. I really love that last stanza, it ends this poem with a bang and keeps it in the mind of the reader.
Well penned!
~lost
-
Bandits United!
Bravo! I love the emphasis on how important meaningful things are. There can be no learning if there is no desire to learn. How true. By the way, excellent with the rhyme. I almost didn't even notice it; the whole poem flowed so seamlessly. Enjoy the spotlight.
-
BANDITS UNITED!
Very good poem about what is really important, education does not mean anything if there is no heart within. You did a great job with your rhyme!
-
Bandits United!!
Really enjoyed the flow that graced itself with impeccable rhyme. Many people have placed such high criticism on me as if saying that by my being smart I'm automatically a snob. It always cracks me up when they do. I have blonde moments too ya know! haha Anyways, glad you're willing to take a stand to these people who have placed their brains above their understanding and respect of human dignity. Excellent job!
~M~
-
BANDITS UNITED!
Excellent description of the world's richest and most powerful, whose singular goal is to annihilate the poor and middle classes. Recently, the History channel presented a documentary of "Secret Societies." Some of the info I already knew, but there was a wealth of data I'd not heard or read: very enlightening as to the causes of poverty and more.
This is very well written; albeit, there are two tiny issues exprensive/expensive; known/knew. The flow is great, as is the rhythm and rhyme. What I like even more is that we seem to be writing on the same wavelink.
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ
-
Bandits United
An awesome poem. I really like the last stanza it flows the most together. This poem has a powerful message. Great write fellow Bandit. Enjoy your day in the spotlight.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
-
Bandits United...
This so reminds me, walking in anothers shoes before we judge not always an easy task, love the line "Your hearts are ran like bee hives" a line full of imagery and emotions...
Have a great day in the spotlight
-
BANDITS UNITED!!
Whitemaiden,
You have expressed your feelings rather succinctly regarding this anomaly of human arrogance and I know most of us have experienced this situation before. As others before me have commented, a degree is a mark of achievment and not a license to belittle others. Thanks for sharing your thoughtful observations in this well done poetical format.
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic Bandit family because WE CARE!
Brother Dennis
-
Bandits United
This is an intriguing poem that looks at how we view status in the world. Those with university education do not have the right to look down on other people- it doesn't make them any better than the rest of us. I agree with your thoughts on this. A well-written poem with a subtle use of rhyme.
-
BANDITS UNITED
What a thought provoking poem we have here! Knowledge and wisdom bereft of humility and an accomodating spirit is nothing short of a hollow database. Degrees are mere acknowledgement of one's academic growth, they don't really enhance a person's worth as a human being. What counts most is the difference one makes in the lives of others by being an example and a source of inspiration. Thanks for sharing this interesting work of yours. Enjoy the spotlight.
Much love, Robert.
-
Bandits United!
I think it is only SOME people behind the degrees that create this sense of inadequacy at times, although I have to say, I've met some of the nicest, most sincere and hard-working people who have studied for many years and attained great heights of knowledge ~ yet talk to them at a party or in a supermarket, they are just as normal and everyday as us and with all the same faults and foibles, too!
Sometimes we, as the less educated, can let our inadequacies push us into feeling resentment towards the higher end of the educational spectrum don't you think?
Anyways, from a purely poetic point of view, you've been creative and communicative, and that's what counts here!
There were a couple of lines that I found didn't read smoothly:
Your hearts are ran like bee hives ( ~?)
Yet for all your exprensive words (expensive/expressive?)
-
BANDITS UNITED!!!
A good exposure of the knowledge versus common sense
debate,very well written with clever rhyming and flow
loved it,Well Done! ....George...
-
BANDITS UNITED OH MY GOSH!
RIGHT! Love the message and the way you wrote this poem with such captivating rhyming.
-
BANDITS UNITED
So truer were never spoken of these.Tis sad it seems like a fad, for they never come back to earth. Your work is well stated , you do know what your are writing about. you ofer wisdon not cutting them down. Feness is the word I do believe ...mac -
BANDITS UNITED
So truer were never spoken of these.Tis sad it seems like a fad, for they never come back to earth. Your work is well stated , you do know what your are writing about. you ofer wisdon not cutting them down. Feness is the word I do believe ...mac
-
Bandits United!
Powerful & insightful write. Love your content, the flow & rhyme. One thing in the third stanza:
Yet for all your [exprensive] words ~ is that expressive or expensive? With this line & type it could be either!
Perhaps you want to correct that. There are all kinds & degrees of Scholars aren't there? I've been discussing this with a brother of mine from Church 'cause we're having a debate on a Biblical issue that's so clear to me 'cause I came upon certain info when I was a child & then again as an adult & came to understand something that is a big debate among 'Scholars' [the word merely means student] that many can't agree upon! Huh...what do 'Scholars' KNOW anyway? All human 'knowledge' is lacking & one day we will come to know the truth! 
Good going here! 
-
BANDITS UNITED
Well, I already read it and commented before, but had to join in with the bandit attack. Have fun with all the comments! -
BANDITS UNITED
This is a powerful piece with a rich story embedded within. It leaves me sad at the end. Too many "experts" find their ignorance exposed when the move "beyond (their) fence" and into the real world. Well done!
- joanne -
-
Bandits United!
Clever write that's gonna get a lot of comments real soon. Enjoy the spotlight on your talented poem that speaks well!
-
BANDITS UNITED
This is great and holds much truth to it more people need to read this best to you always take care
-
Bandits United!
Masterful!
I really enjoy this poem for the raw intensity and honesty that flows forth, few have the guts to admit they feel this when they think about those in their fancy empty homes of tiles and marble
Wonderful poem! Strong, and provocative
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
-
Awesome!
Most definently your best regarding rhythm and you know I love the subject matter too.
I must say though, far less than half of those who go to college end up being rich. Most of the people I know who went to college are big nothings. It's the ones who skipped college and went into business for themselves that wind up on top.
Great poem though.
Adding your comment:
1 - 26 of 26
