A promise that was broken
Fatal words were left unspoken
The truest shades of waylay
Resonate against my every day
Your new smile is the evidence
That I have failed at my purpose
A happiness that I could not provide
Tied down in love, it was denied
It pains me to lose the only man
Who ever kissed my lowly hand
You glossed all the stars in my sky
With you, there was never an alibi
I labeled your words as fate
Gingerly saved one special date
But the burning embers went untended
I didn't realize forever had ended
Now, I dream of a fictious night
When you will save me from this plight
Hand-in-hand, we'll walk together
But this will be only a dream, forever
Author notes
prompt: broken love.
"Shatter My Soul, Let My Heart Ache"
In a list
A contest entry
- Heart's Perdition by Oedhel.
400 points, ended January 29, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What was your first impression?
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Judge here.
First off I wanted to say thanks for entering this poem in my contest. Mucho appreciation for that. [:
I think that this poem was filled with a lot of emotion, which was what I asked for and Im glad you didn't break my rules, 5 brownie points for that lmao. Anyways, I'm sorry that you had to go through that, I know how you feel and it completely sucks. But hopefully things get better
Good luck in my contest ! =) -
love it..
thanks for entering and good luck!!
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A touching piece, and a fittig end to a poem that reads like a shattered dream. Thanks for entering.
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wow this is amazing i truly hope you got him back this made me want to cry at the emotion but smile at the talent
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woow.THis is truly sweet and every way possible but i'm sorry i can't take prewrites in my contest i'm truly sorry
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this is a great little poem...
its romantic and heart felt...
good luck with it
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I am... hmmm I am speechless
In a goodway at a loss of words would be a understatement
This is one of the best poems I have read so far.
Thank you for entering!
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Beautifully written.
A lovely job with this piece!
Great job!
Thank you for entering and good luck
♥ Kathraina
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Wonderful Poem
Congratulations on winning Bronze. You penned a very heartfelt poem and it was a pleasure to read this morning. I love your rhyming too. Take care, Sandy
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this is sad. =[ but the flow seems a little off but maybe its just how im reading it. thanks for entering and good luck
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aww im sorry you broke up =[
its a great poem though. actually its wonderful!
"Now, I dream of a fictious night
When you will save me from this plight
Hand-in-hand, we'll walk together
But this will be only a dream, forever" so sad ='[
great write anyway and good luck in the contests you'l do great =]
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