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War

Ruthless, hungry sons of war, murdering our hope and love
Bloody money is not worth the price of the slaughtering of the dove
Bigger, better killing machines, my horse is bigger than yours
Another hundred killed tonight, my eyes are filled with gore
Children brainwahsed to unjustly despise the things they do not know
THe outcasted being is immediately know as their countries biggest foe
The mockingbird has been destroyed, and with it a thousand souls
I hope your happy with what you've done, you've accomplished all your goals

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Wow I really love writing in math class
I hate feet

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  • RazorbladeKiss14
    September 13
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    I loved this poem! Great job! Good luck and thanks for entering my contest!!!


  • XxINSOMNIAxX
    August 5
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    ....

    Nice, I liked this peom it. Every line I love it!

  • it all i know
    August 4

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    powerful

    Children brainwahsed to unjustly despise the things they do not know
    THe outcasted being is immediately know as their countries biggest foe

    your many lines of poetry are inspiring. I'm impressed good job!


  • SincerelyMegan
    May 12
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    Wow, this is really powerful.
    Is pretty short for the most part, which I like.

    I also like how you used "Bloody money is not worth the price of the slaughtering of the dove
    Bigger, better killing machines, my horse is bigger than yours"
    it just shows some of the few sins in our government.


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    April 25

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    DEMOCRACY A BIG SLAP TO ALL THOSE WHO HOPES BETTER THINGS IN THE FUTURE

    I WOULD LOVE TO GIVE YOU A REFERENCE TO READ

    KHILAFA SYSTEM IN ISLAM
    AND HISTORY OF KHILAFA
    PLZ READ YOU WILL GET ALOTTTT IN IT

    I wish American Government comes to see her own people begging for jobs and money
    government spending billions of dollars to destroy other countries
    but She doesn't look forward to build and invest in her own land for own people

    THANKS FOR ENTERING
    IT WAS A SIMPLE BUT MORE EFFECTIVE PIECE OF WORK
    NICE ONE
    SPECIALLY THE WAY YOU POISONED THE WORDS WITH SWEET TOXIC WORDS

    Wish we Could see some signs of betterment in World

    so tired to see blood and tears all around

    WONDERFUL STOCK!
    THANKS
    YOU SCORED 69 IN MY CONTEST OUT OF 100
    BY
    THE POET OF HEARTS AND BEAUTIFUL WORDS


  • TheStreetReverend
    April 3

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    i really enjoyed this piece, it's very raw and blunt. i like the overall tone and structure
    this line is awesome;
    The mockingbird has been destroyed, and with it a thousand souls


  • Heroesrox
    March 4
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    Stunning piece! Thanks so much for a brilliant share! Best wishes to you.

  • vickievale
    March 1

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    vickie vale

    great poem you are a good writer you captute emotions very well in your writing I give you five stars keep up the good work


  • SunDew
    February 21

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    stephanie

    This is an amazing write! Did you take a peek at my poems? I have one called War, too. It's the first one I ever wrote, actually.

    I love the way it rhymes & flows. It brings up images I've seen of Nazis. Although this could be applied to nearly any war, I ask myself if you had a specific group of people in mind when you wrote this one. If you did, was it the Nazis & Hitler you were thinking of?

    I love poems that make me ask questions such as that. Makes me want to know more about how the poem was born, what the author is like, what they were thinking.

    Thanks for sharing & good luck!
    ~Bright Cheetah

  • wendymolly
    February 15

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    I've never written well on the subject of war, you've done a superb handling of it!!!
    Your definitely a finalist!!!!! Have a nice day!
    take care always,
    Tand


  • Broken-Rickie
    February 14
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    simply amazing


  • Symphony
    February 7

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    You remind me of myself - I used to be always writing poetry during school, and, actually, I remember writing a war poem during Accounting once upon a time - so obviously it's something about numbers that moves the brain to writing poetry

    Thought this was very passionate, and very powerful - the constant 'chanting' type way of speech gave way to the demands of the poem, and let it run free - it was great to read!

    Thank you for entering


  • Cyanide Dreams
    February 7
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    lmao at the AN. This is an intersting write and oh so true. Good job on this. The imagery and emotion in the poem is great. The message is clear and very true. War is a horrible thing and it truly does these things to our country, families, friends, etc. Peace is forgotten amongst war. Very nicely written and very true. Thank you for entering and best of luck.

    Josh


  • sanguigno
    February 4

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    oooo this makes me think ALOT its making the wheels in my mind turn and groan cause that dont happen much

    thanks for entering!


  • Denerica silver member
    February 2

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    Shedding the Doves blood...we all need a Savior and for the war to stop...emotional well written piece. Blessings.


  • fairytalelovestory
    February 2
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    this is really good good luck


  • halfpast4ever
    February 1

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    Children brainwahsed to unjustly despise the things they do not know<-----one of my faveorite lines. i love the way you took something more and changed it to something i wouldnt have expected. i love the relation to war, it is a major problem, and its something im totally against. i love this poem, the meaning behind really captures my attention and makes me enjoy it even more


  • Rhythm Child
    January 27

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    The mockingbird has been destroyed, and with it a thousand souls

    very chilling line
    my favourite of the poem

    only correction would be brainwashed

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