When you feel you've been let down
And your dreams are blown away
Look upward, to the heavens
Don't let your worries stay
Re-assess your style of living
Have small goals you can achieve
Make your every action follow
The pathway you believe.
Be grateful for your advantages
For your health and for your home
For the fact that you are never left alone.
Climb up from where you think you are
Take just one small step each time
And when next you write your poetry
Make sure the damn stuff rhymes.
Author notes
Life cannot be all serious, you must have some fun along the way
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Smiling!!!!
This past week you have brought a smile to my face every time I have read soneting you wrote. Although you are serious at times, you also have a very good sense of humor. You seem to spring forth with something just when I need it..ROFL... and yes, I do need to try to ryhme..although freestyle is my best.
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Thank you for your lovely comment. I am glad you had a smile when you read this one. Life is not easy, but should have it's lighter moments. Hence the last two lines of this poem.
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Oh dear - are you speaking to me? lol! I do write in rhyme, and strict form, at times, you know I do!
I love this poem, for the message, and for the hiatus in it.
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No my dear, I am not speaking to you personally. lol !!! This was just a bit of fun with a message hidden in the open for everyone to see. I was told by a dear friend I was too serious. lol again. I appreciate your commenting and thank you for it.
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Love this poem very much and we should all heed that message. Talking about ryming. In the third verse, it seems you have left out a line somewhere, cause this is the only one that didn't have a four line rhyme.
Hence...Be grateful for your advantages
For your health and for your home
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For the fact that you are never alone.
Perhaps the fact that you said in the last line, Make sure the damn stuff rhymes, it might have been diliberate.
Anyhow, it was superb and Well said all the way.
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I am quite stunned at the responses to this one. Thank you for astute comment and observations. The missed rhyme was an accident but I won't alter anything at this time. It sort of fits with what I was trying to say in the poem.
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Hi Bob, I think I'm going to tag this to my refrigerator...sometimes I forget to smile...mussie
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Life is a bugger sometimes but you can cope with most things when you can have the occasional giggle.
I appreciate your comments and say thank you for them.
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This is exctly what I did in troubled times which happen to be a whole year of 2008. But things are gettin into place this year...Practically lived every word of this through last year.You should have written it last year..lol
Love it..
Susan
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Full credit to you Susan. Life can be very troubled but it will pass and you just have to laugh a little every once in a while. Many thanks for your kindness in commenting.
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Ok, I wasn't expecting that ending but it gave me a smile. A nice inspirational write here, we all need one of these from time to time. Good job...alby
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Many thanks Alby. Many of us live life seriously without enough laughter in it. The poem is syaing life is very serious but enjoy what you can when you can.
Live, love, laugh and be happy.
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agree wholeheartedly Bob, although I think this write has serious undertones glad to see you writing again mate
Cheers
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Thanks Rob, you picked it all up straight away. Yes there are serious undertones to it, but I think only some will get them, most will get the message though. I never stopped writing mate. Just been on Storywrite or Alljournal more lately. Our cricketers are not very good, are they?
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Yes, life shouldn't be so serious Bob! Great poem mate. Happy Aussie Day!
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Thanks John. We all have to live and much of life is serious business, but no need for all of it to be like that.
Happy Aussie Day to you too even though we just lost the one day cricket series to south Africa. Or, I reckon we have.222 is not enough runs.
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