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if you were here I wouldn't be so cold

leaves have fallen
down on me
before

but in those
autumn days
of yore

the ground was soft
and you were there
to keep me warm

A contest entry

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  • Poesing
    March 20

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    Yes,...........I think so.............you have a love lost, and now you're only covered in a bunch of autumn leaves, right? Very touching 26 word piece.


  • Tqop
    February 1
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    Sorry here's your applause.

  • Tqop
    February 1

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    Nice.

    Very beautiful. Again I liked the entire poem. I liked the title especially, as it grabbed your heart, and it made you want to read the poem. Well done, Poet.


  • KyleBerg gold member
    January 26

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    It is clear, thanks to the title. Such a bittersweet tale of loss... I can relate and I feel the sorrow in this piece. Very moving.

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