she was the best dancer
and she knew it, confident-
strong, supple, with grace
she moved as we all mimicked
our pathetic attempts while
the teacher snapped at her pose.
"higher," she commanded, correcting-
determined, was our Catalina Rose.
willful, she would continue
even after the music stopped.
for years, taunting the poise-
mamba, ballet, flamenco, salsa
Catalina reigned, and tutored
those of us who needed crutches,
barres and better posture.
grace defined all in her clutches.
tournaments drew an envious bunch-
Catalina did more than sweep
trophies and fame for our school.
everyone she encountered
would dance with her, as though
experts they would instantly become.
deftly she lead partners to space
this was more than fine for some.
years it would be before,
contact thinned and we moved on.
marriage, children, affairs aside-
press followed Catalina's superb rise
to fame, fortune, a school opening
teaching the Rose's style and whirls,
twirls, natural movement and stance.
best for my daughter, and lucky young girls.
Artist: Crescendo II by Mark Spain
Author notes
Catalina Rose: a positive rival/role model/life-long best friend.
Artist credit: Crescendo II by Mark Spain
L'Arora form created by Laura Lamarca
http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2348667
La is Laura Lamarca's signature. "Arora" is Italian. This is her 10th created form to date.
Form description:
8 lines per stanza
Rhyme scheme a,b,c,d,e,f,g,f
No set syllable count per line.
Minimum length 4 stanzas with no maximum length stipulation.
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I thought this was pretty cool - it's far from what I usually read. I'm not much of a dancer/girly-poem kind of guy, haha, but regardless this is still nice.
I liked stanza two the best. Perhaps it's because of the word choice...just the general language.
"even after the music stopped.
for years, taunting the poise-
mamba, ballet, flamenco, salsa"
-usually I don't like listing, but this was necessary here. And the words danced in this stanza. --and my word choice there wasn't intentional ironically.
Having tried this form, I thought you did pretty good.
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I'm not one much for listing either. This was writing outside of my zone. I'm no dancer either.
Had to research a bit and stretch my abilities. Thank you for your comment, it was most helpful.
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Name: Catalina Rose
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