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caught in your smile

Between blank stares
I catch a glimpse of your smile
And watch it fade away

Stuck in a mixture of
Meaningless words and shared giggles
I search for an answer

As my dreams mingle with stars
With tiptoed feet I reach for them
But I stumble too many times



A moment caught in your smile
Is like a thought caught in confusion
The truth is too harsh
Maybe living a lie is my only alternative

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  • Never Known
    February 8

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    Wow...

    I LOVE THIS POEM. A moment caught in your smile... its so passionate. Keep it up girl.


  • LoveDeprived
    January 27

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    arghhhhhhhh you beat me everytime xD why are you so damn good! keke ;p... the way you use the words and create into this wonderful piece you just dont merely write you paint the words as if they're just some sparkling colors fit into wonderful spots which our minds(reader's mind) always relate too.. the simplicity but also profoundness is extremely heart warming to read..

    "The truth is too harsh
    Maybe living a lie is my only alternative"

    you took my line!!! LOL.. this so sounds like me, damn why'd i never thought of it! maybe cause my imagination and creativeness is too limited compared to your wonderful poetic mind xD


  • Mr.
    January 27
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    Beautiful poem Ranji! Those were some very original thoughts.


  • Sunkissed xo
    January 26

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    oooh la la
    nice!
    beautiful imagery, and strong emotion.
    i felt as though i was right here in your shoes, experiencing it all!
    this is fantastic, and a delight to read.
    keep up the super duper work twinnie!


  • transit
    January 26

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    ooo

    The emotions are powerful and the lenght was just right. The poem seems to point to one moment like the prompt suggests.

    The comparisons of sad feelings and hope is great. Good luck!!

    ~transit~


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    January 25

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    so many beautiful images here like tiptoed which gives vision to the action

    'The truth is too harsh
    Maybe living a lie
    is my only alternative'

    amazing wording...quote-worthy
    got me thinking is fantasy
    considered a lie hehe


  • your.guardian.angel
    January 25
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    I loved it!


  • LovelyTraces
    January 25

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    This is amazing!! I'm impressed. I love your wording!

    "As my dreams mingle with stars
    With tiptoed feet I reach for them"

    That's my favorite part. You had a wonderful take on the prompt. Great job and Good luck!!

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