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Matched Souls Danced

Matched souls danced by ~boiserck
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On the lake

Night sky and it's reflection
The truth and mirrored perfection

Mountains sang soft

It seemed all creation swayed
To the ancient melody played

Matched souls danced
Like light on children's eyes
Curious forest nymphs watched
New love bloom 'neath mountain skies



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Written February 17th, 2004

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  • Faile
    February 19, 2004
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    great!

    nice write! i love the line "the truth and mirrored perfection"
    awesome! i like the rhyme in it too tho i usually don't, it doesn't get too rhythmic. i agree with pastiche that poetry should show things in another light but it's really hard to do. u did a wonderful job at it!


  • pastiche
    February 18, 2004
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    This really is a written photograph... Beautiful images:
    "Mountains sang"; "light on children's eyes" - quite unique views.
    This is only a personal view but I believe that poetry should take the simple everyday things and show them in another light - something to make us think: "But of course..." - extend the mind... Yours certainly did that to me.
    Great poem, no wasted words...
    Thankyou,
    Keep writing!
    Best wishes