Eyes this delicate need an outlet to speak through.
Incapable of tears, the sun hides and lets the clouds cry.
I drink its sweet rain, running red down my cheekbones.
Refined roses can't get enough water,
as I can't get enough of you.
This melody is lacking, a missing piece,
departed from my life like the light from my eyes.
The radiance still shines in yours, dazzling the clouds.
They've stopped crying, haven't you heard?
A glimpse of the sun was seen, but alas
Melancholy pleads for a moment more.
Towards me those beautiful eyes gaze
for that one seraphic moment in time.
My enticed heart leaps two beats, singing gloriously.
And then cold, do those eyes turn, a foreboding shade of hate.
Heart slashed, I don a mask of fake felicity
with a smile that holds teeth bleached morbid,
to conceal the torn entity underneath.
The clouds continue their downpour once more;
my white blouse drenched red,
my flushed face drained white.
Head tilted back to face the angry sky,
the wind screams malovence, my open mouth filling with poison.
Raindrops like bullets, piercing my skin, burning on contact.
You control the rain now.
I can see your face in the inflamed clouds. So Beautiful.
I don't mind the pain you give me. I crave your touch.
I drown in your smile of sin.
Author notes
S a m a n t h a M a r i e
Option 4
I love this poem because it reminds me that i'm stronger now, and what happened in my past no longer controls me. This poem is a reminder of my freedom.
A contest entry
- "My First AP anniversary" (NOW OPEN TO PREWRITES WITH TROPHIES,SO ENTER) by rinzurajan.
2000 points, ended November 29, 34 entries
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FLAWLESS!
This was a tragically beautiful piece. Tremendous choreography of words! You are unquestionably a brilliant writer! From the first line all the way through the last I was so into it and couldn't take my eyes off of my computer monitor. LOL! I can't really give you much of a critique considering there's nothing that needs to be revised not even tweaked. Phenomenal poem!
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thank u lol i think this is the best compliment I've ever been given
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There is a lot of meaning to this poem. Very inspirational, it reminds me of the relationship I have with my boyfriend, I will cater to his every need and sometimes I wonder why I get nothing back. But in the end I just smile, I don't mind going unnoticed, just as long as he's happy.
I got a lot out of this piece. Brilliant write x
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Thank you, you got the meaning perfect
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Very deep. Great job, I think this is perfect.
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Thank you
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painfully good.
i like the raw emotion.
its good. name/age in authors note remember!
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Thank you!
btw love your hair
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VERY good.
Geez.
This was like, THE best extended metaphor I've ever seen in my life.
And the last line was an amazing way to wrap it up.
Great write(:
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thank you
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this is a powerful piece and very fitting to the contest. I like certain words which you have used through the poem to fit the theme - such as "face the angry sky", "your face in the inflamed clouds", "my colored face drained white" - the repetition of not only the word face, but the adjectives which surround it works really well. congrats on this piece. Emmy
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Thank you
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oh my, that was one of the best things ive ever read on this site! seriously it was amazing!
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Thank you : DDD
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I love your voice and I love that you speak exactly how you feel, not afraid to hide your sadness. I also wanna ask you about who or what it's about. It is a beautiful poem my dear. I'm sorry you're in such pain. *kisses*
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Wow this is a very powerful piece.
Raindrops like bullets, piercing my skin, burning on contact.
You control the rain now.
Great piece, very original wording. Perfect in everyway to me.
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i love how you get like 10 times better with each poem you publish.
i love watching you grow :]
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awwww thanks Wesley dear <3
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hmmmmmm very good, very good indeed... but if you dont mind me asking who have you "Enslaved" yourself to?
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It's a metaphor
and a long story.
I'll type it out and send you a message later i don't feel like doing that now
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