Peace migrated to points south
and the powder drifts
getting into eyes and mouth
we pray the wind shifts
as the one winged butterfly
endeavors to take flight
and the blue bleeds from the sky
leaving it a ghostly white.
A contest entry
- How much courage do you have? by masterblaster.
13000 points, ended March 7, 2009, 22 entries
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Comments
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Hi, this is an interesting little poem, meter is a little on the wild side, Di
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I love the frigidity in this, and not just the physical but there is an underlying emotional coldness too. I also really like your word choices, and placement - makes everything so tight, and perfect!
Best wishes in the contest.
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I very much like how these words make me feel; there is distance and longing.
great work here!
ken
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Vivid Beauty...
This is very impressive, stunning imagery indeed.
The rhyme and meter is exellent in form.
Thank you for sharing your poetic talent.
Tony
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The "ands" give the lines a feeling that the thought goes on, changing directions but going on...like the image of the butterfly..on the breeze...some wonderful phrases here..evocative, thoughtful depth...PK
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