Evaluate, explain
Why? the ecv
Has not been changed!
It need not be!
Don’t fix! It aint
Broker stock brokers
All fall. The world
Turns and burns
With wars and sore
Like Gordon Brown
Sauce instead of tomato
Red tie on a green shirt
Less men more women
More beetle juice
I want more juice!
Less dry systems.
Author notes
Written instead of the essay, just following my thoughts. I didn't like the essay one little bit.
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did it make sense?
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This piece follows a train of thought very well. I enjoeyd its abstract edge. Keep writing =]
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Not really, but that's ok
I wanted some expansion. The words are asking for expansion, what is the symbolism. But then again, you open with 'evaluate, explain, why?' Certainly, why explain. Read it and think. That is what poetry is about right, interpretation? I like 'red tie on a green shirt.' -
I was a little confused...but it makes you think.
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It's a bit confusing, but I enjoyed reflecting on some of the ideas here, it reads more like a brainstorming session than a poem though, but probably because I like more complexity, makes me think about the grading systems and how they do not prepare us for the REAL life ahead, cannot grade the abilty to love or survive, after all, and it's as if life is all numbers and politics.
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Outstanding
This poem works as a stream of conciousness each idea leading to the next. I liked how the poem showed a very natural progression of ideas but that each one was unexpected and took the reader in a new direction. An interesting poem.
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