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Melody

If I sit here,
will you notice?

Can you hear me?

Breathe me music,
loud enough to care...

If I wander,
will you follow?
Do you hear
my plea?

The melody of sorrow
tastes the salt, and
asks me for oasis.

Listen,
and tell me to live,
but show me how...

If I sing tears,
will you wipe it away?

Or will you watch me
helplessly,
like I did?



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  • Ken-Maverick
    April 3, 2009

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    Ah yes, something I can somewhat relate to,
    "Listen, and tell me to live, but show me how..."
    Love that part!!! Another wonderful write.

    Ken


  • hyper thing
    February 12, 2009
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    Wow this poem is full of emotion and is so good


  • Kuranya gold member
    February 8, 2009

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    Such a heartbreaking piece with so many questions that may never be answered. Well done. Best to you in the contest