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After men came to paradise.

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Songs no longer leap from the strings,
sand and storm, and dead wood all that listens,
men took what they wanted, arrows and slings,
tore the one time beauty, nothing glistens.

Took the spirit from the tree she loved so
from the field where once the heather bloomed
wars stacked one on others, dealt the death blow
beauty, once so bountiful consumed.

Now, the strings are sad and fingers achin',
memories and ghosts all that remain,
hope's no longer flutterin' all's forsaken,
all the legacy men left was pain.
where once there was such purity, decay
all that once was beauty, stolen away

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The Last Tree by =Pygar

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  • Kuranya gold member
    February 8, 2009

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    Wow this rolled off the tongue with such ease and wonderfully it is worded. I am left with such a sad feeling. Best to you in the contest


  • ennovy silver member
    January 26, 2009

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    Sounds wonderful and yet it so sad that she left in pain, broken hearted...love the rhyme, balance of this read...excellenr poem...novy


  • Amera gold member
    January 26, 2009
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    forgot these:


  • Amera gold member
    January 26, 2009

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    Emotion, imagery and flow; all that makes a great poem. You should be proud of this. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Sandygram silver member
    January 26, 2009

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    Amazing Write

    What a wonderful poem. I think this is one of your best. The imagery is terrific.
    You describe the ravages and effects war has on nature and the land. It hads been so since the beginning of time.
    Thank you for shaing. Excellent poem!!!!

    Take care and blessings to you.

    Hugs and Smiles,
    Sandy


  • BonnieQ silver member
    January 26, 2009

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    Breathtakingly Sad & True

    Oh, dearest brother, this is at once sad and true; man has destroyed what God so lovingly created for us. . . just for us! This is incredibly beautifully written, brings life to the picture and tells its story. This must, and I say must, take the GOLD; for I don't think any poet could have done such justice to the picture prompt. You are the master poet here.

    Much love & hugs, SisBon


  • thepoetssoul
    January 26, 2009

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    Beautifully sad...
    A wonderful creation of beauty and death.
    You have done the picture justice poet.
    Best to you in all you do.

    Tony


  • Denerica
    January 25, 2009
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    There you go again, what a powerful, heart clenching truth...loved it. Blessings.


  • azlyn gold member
    January 25, 2009

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    How very true...so befitting the image! This is a very emotional and powerful write. Best to you in the contest!!!

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