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Chatoyant Art

Chatoyant flakes of paint designed
to gage the simulacrums of the mind
to lighten shades of pencil sighs
that dare to dim the brightest eyes!

Emotive shards of transit glass
standing proud within their frames, I cannot pass.
I Stopped. To view it once again
and saw a world beyond domain

Each careful brush stroke, choroused sound
as voiceless colours paint, canvas ground
with tints of laughter, tones of grace
etching priceless smiles on someone's face

Chatoyant specks of Turquoise blue
that captures what I see in you
and so steals breath from vellum lungs
causing disabled hearts to skip!

     .....with silent tongues. 

The muslin glaze that's left to dry
now idle in the sun, that gift must lie.
Until the one I love arrives
because she can see with her heart and not with her eyes!

Author notes

My own Background of a turquoise fractal.

This poem is very personal. it is about the day I had today.
having lunch with a Friend and a touching story about a physically challenged youth who was determined to never gave up. so this line "causing disabled hearts to skip" is special.
Then looking and beautiful paintings in an art gallery because of the lunch.
I asked for a artistic mirror to be designed and painted for my mums birthday and the last line to see into the mirror with her heart and not her eyes. this means many things. it means she can look past her age and see the beauty I see in her liking to a early line in this poem.
also that the physical gift is not the most important one and she will see the love with her heart and not the physical gift with her eyes.
and also the last interpretation where the gift is a mirror and she can see how much her heart and her love means to me.

For my Inspiration I would like to thank. Ray Savill for the excuse to forget the busy world around me and enjoy a world outside the walls of education.

I would like to thank my dyslexia for the determination to try and never give up.

I would like to thank the artist who sketched and painted this picture, I wish you could have seen them.

And of course I want to thank and send much love to my Mummy who I love and cherrish with all my heart and without her I would'nt even be a reflection of the individual i am today.
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Thankyouxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

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  • Ellis gold member
    August 3, 2009

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    Excellent Writing

    It is wonderful the amount of time you take with the Author's Notes to share with us what went into your writing of a poem. It allows us to understand and appreciate the poem more. (I need to start doing that.)

    The day in and of this poem glows through it.


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    January 27, 2009

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    Wonderful

    Wonderful flow of words. You really put your heart in to it. It is a very beatiful poem. It was a pleasure reading your work.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 26, 2009

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    Ooh....this is awesome the poem, as I am an artist, worked with those with learning disabilities..the whole write, authors notes, is so moving...This is being bookmarked to read and re read again! write!


  • WhisperingMystic
    January 26, 2009
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    Right ON!

    Wonderful creative use of language - you have a real gift. Can't wait to read more of your work.


  • Silent Hope7
    January 26, 2009
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    Beautiful

    This is so amazing wow such a well written poem!! I loved it!!!!


  • thegirlsafaultline.
    January 26, 2009

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    ______________________________________
    "Chatoyant specks of Turquoise blue
    that captures what I see in you
    and so steals breath from vellum lungs
    causing disabled hearts to skip!

    .....with silent tongues. "

    Gahh.
    That stanza was so beautiful.
    The whole poem was beautiful, really.
    Incredible and empowering.
    Great write


  • I-Am-Custard
    January 26, 2009

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    Nice rhyme. I like that this isn't too strict. If people try to force it you end up with something stilted. This is more organic. Lovely imagery too, and I love that last line.
    A nice write.


  • campanaro silver member
    January 26, 2009

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    Excellent!

    Very moving..
    Thank you for writing this.
    It certainly touched my heart.
    Love Peace,
    campanaro

  • Axe Tither Mizzens
    January 26, 2009

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    wonderful

    fantastic poem. I did not need your explanation to know and see how special it is. But thank you for sharing. Sometimes a poem can be reall touching and personal to the reader without having the same reason as the writer. Wonderful write.

  • Salty Hibiscus
    January 26, 2009

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    beautiful piece of poetry. a great rhyme scheme. your ap notes are informative and am glad that people won't give up just because of their disability. i am one of them too, i won't give up. well done and thanks for sharing your awesome work. =)


  • TheSpiralGenerator
    January 25, 2009

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    This is a very beautiful, captivating poem. And the personal meaning you have behind it makes it that more beautiful. Great poem!

  • SimplySonnets gold member
    January 25, 2009

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    To be part of such a graphic experience was wonderful.

    You have placed the everyday onto a different plain, almost magical, I watched the enchanted reception, of the picture mirror, into your being it sent messages of love, that surpassed all verbal language, your mum is indeed fortunate to be the recipient of such affection.

    Until the one I love arrives
    because she can see with her heart and not with her eyes!

    love the tale, thank you for a delightful poem.


  • Angelflower
    January 25, 2009

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    this was really beautiful.. I don't know what to say really.. you have such a big heart and so much more, this was such an emotional write.. bravo darlin'!

    Angel


  • Chris Lee
    January 25, 2009
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    a beautiful piece. thank you for sharing it with us.

  • patrick20traveler
    January 25, 2009

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    I couldn't form a single, clear image in my mind as I read, but your language, meter and flow are absolutely beautiful. Smooth as silk.

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