When your tears start to well up inside,
and you can't chase the blues goodbye.
On the verge of just crying your eyes out,
overwhelmed you break down and cry.
Your emotions are going in all directions,
least little word makes you feel so bad.
Your sensitivity tolerance is below zero,
thoughts of melancholy, are turning sad.
The day began happy without a care,
was another great morning to be alive.
Had my faith in God to give me strength,
the sheer determination I could survive.
That changed as I read words you wrote,
brought back a heartbreaking memory.
Then you said something that was hurtful,
not caring about me or my sensitivity.
So I just sat and cried my eyes out alone,
that made me feel better for a little while.
But the tears have returned as I sit here,
all these memories just won't let me smile.
Author notes
Contest Prompt...
I want a thousand tears scattered to the wind, consumed by the barren heart… The shadow of a lover that once was or may never have been…Give my the words, whispered like a rich mead,spilling over the ears, intoxicating the soul…Love…
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A contest entry
- Heart's Perdition by Oedhel.
400 points, ended January 29, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very sweet and sad. It's a true tale of lost love for one who has had a hard time in acceptance. Charming and with a beautiful flow to the words.
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Good Morning Rovingone
A pleasure to read this coment this mornuing. Thank you so much for reading. You take care and I hope you have a wonderful weekend. You take care, Sandy
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So beautifuly written Sandy. For me this is perfect and describes where we all are sometimes, where I am at far too often. The range of feelings that go through you when a nice hopeful day turns to pain. Sheila
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Thank you LittleMoon. A lovely comment you have written. Thank you. It is most appreciated. Take care, Sandy
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Something we all go through
In life sometimes it seems like an every day thing. When people put us through the ringer. Pain still hurts , then we cry and cry...mac
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Thank you Mac. Your comment was wonderful and appreciated. Take care dear friend. Sandy
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I'm almost thinking this may fare better as a free verse, try removing the rhymths, and see how you go with it, and if you don't like it, just dont' save it
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Thank you for the nice comment. I appreciate you reading and commenting. Take care, Sandy
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Rhyme and flow is smooth. The reader is taken on sad, lonely trip with this prompt. The narrator with broken heart and tears flowing down cheeks that no longer glow. Spirit draws strength to survive, yet memories can't escape the emotions shattered in painful words that were wrote. Good luck with the contest, this deserves trophy,
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Hello Dan
It is nice to see you stop by and read. I always enjoy your thoughtful comments and have missed them. Hope all is well. Hugs and Smiles for you.
Blessings ,Sandy
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