On this train
going up north
to drown my lips in all the wine
I think it is time..
That I choose if it's red or if it's
you.
On this train
subdued
brief
stops..
Do you relate to the aching heart?
In my slumber on this train
I awoke to find
I still have you on my mind.
A bottle of red is what I chose.
No better not.. I suppose
The old lady continues to stare.
I wonder if you'll be there..
Did I miss the stop?
A contest entry
- ~Through With Love~ by Still Standing.
1500 points, ended February 24, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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love it
both the words and the artwork, stunning just stunning
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wow
another great piece!!! and yes i noticed the pic both times too and yes very nice.
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Amazing write Sis. So intriguing and interesting...
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Thank you
I really appreciate the kind words
and you taking the time to stop by.
I'm glad you liked it my friend.
Thanks..
Take care
Love Peace
campanaro
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Awesome piece and I love your art! Is is wood or a painting? It looks like lovely wood! Awesome job, dear sister! Thanks for the wonderful share! Keep up the great work!
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I think its great
I actually came across this piece when it was in the other contest..I like it then and I like it now, this part:
Do you relate to the aching heart?
In my slumber on this train
I awoke to find
I still have you on my mind.
Dont you hat that Sh!t! Thanks for the entry and good luck!!!! -
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A million thanks
Still Standing
Thanks for taking the time to read this write
equally important
I'm glad you liked it:~)
Take care
Love peace
campanaro
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Thank you for your very profound entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Poetryintheblood
Yes it is always worth fighting for.Always
In this poem I wrote, at the end..it is not necessarily
the very end.
Hang in there:~) don't give up on love it is still sweeter
much sweeter.
The old rhyme
(Imagine it saying just.. loves me not)
Take care
Love Peace,
campanaro -
Thank you..
Hi Kathleen,
That was so nice of you to say..
Really appreciate those kind words.
Again,
Thank you.
Take care
Love Peace,
campanaro -
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Aw! You and Kathie are my friends!
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Intriguing...
This captures the reader in the moment & is filled with emotion. The mystery here is up front & curious. I like this. It left me wanting more. Good write. I like story poems, though I'm not very good at creating them. I can only write one if it's about my life or if I have a good prompt to work from. I'm a inspirational writer & not a crafter of words. 
You should enter this into a Contest. I think it's 
Have fun here at AP!
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The painting is gorgeous. and the ending is wonderful to say the least, I'm a little distracted at the moment or else I could give more of a response, I'm watching this weird lifetime movie. lol. No idea what is going on.
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Thank you..
Hi Thanks so much for the nice compliment.
I'm also glad that you like my Art.Actually it's Pyrographic Creative Art.
It's one of many pieces I've done.
I love your Pen name.
It's great.
Best to you
Love Peace,
campanaro
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