Seemingly unknown,
Fear feeds upon your soul and mind
that blood-stained hand on the wall
creeping in and taking everything you know
stealing your hearts works
stealing who you are.
Author notes
Image credit: http://shinydragonfly.deviantart.com/
I chose option 7
Rules: CM
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Comments
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I really like this poem I only see one thing that I would fix is this line. "stealing your hearts works" " Hearts works" being two plurals makes the reader stumble a bit, other hen that its wonderful.
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Please check rule no. 5
thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Hebz -
For such a short poem, this says a lot. It shows the raw emotion that is fear, at it's very basic and primitive state, but at the same time, it delves deep into the emotions of the reader.
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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RULES RULES RULES
Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my contest I SIT and I
ROCK and I WAIT with your submission FEAR IS A BEAST.
Please return to the contest rules; there you will take note that some thing must be placed in the
Author's Notes.
When you have followed these simple rules, please notify me and I'll be happy to read and enter your poem into the running.
Best regards,
Liquid -
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I always forget to do that with prewrites. It's been done
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pic was great and so was the poem. good job here.
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Excellent picture with this poem. It really added to it. This piece was short, but that didn't mean it wasn't strong. I enjoyed this poem. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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Due to the requirements of this contest, I have to remove your poem because it is not a gold trophy winning poem. I'm sorry because this was a great poem. Keep up the good work. ~Des
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now that I got some points thaought you would love some and good luck
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This was very cool short and dark very nice indeed. I thbink you did a wonderful job on this bravo friend.
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Wow I like it and thank you for entering the contest
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Short & dark, yet beautifully
portrayed.
Good write!!
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Indeed you are right, fear is a beast, but it's also a very natural process. As long as we don't let it control our lives, then fear is good for us, as it keeps us safe from harm. Phobias and social fears shouldn't go out of order though, we need to balance what we dislike to what we will let paralyze us.
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Picture and poem go great together. This is a well written piece. Nice and dark! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!
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great
please join the group
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A powerfully written piece! Full of emotion! Thankyou for entering into this contest, What would you like to be in my AP family?
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What a terrible feeling to have inside of you!
Well done and thanks a lot for your entry!
Jeremy0826 -
Wow very short but outstandingly written. Such words of wisdom well done its got lovely structure and style to it!
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Holy Pancakes!
I love this piece. it flows so well and as we well know, I am a stickler for punctuation and grammar. you didn't let me down. Very well done.
if we let it fear will eat us alive and eave us a quivering wreck. Unable to trust or, be trusted. great job
well done, and thanks for entering,
-Dusty-
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an interesting piece nicely done thanks for entering
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I like this, but I'm going to say "no".
I want you to come back a third time (yeah, I'm giving you permission), with something like this, except with more imagery and metaphor. I think you have it in you, but I want to see something more developed that shows me you have potential to compete with the top dog poets, so to speak. -
wow.. i actually REALLLLLY like this... a very unusual and unique take on such a picture like that.. a great read
Thanks for entering my contest,
and best of luck!
Your judge,
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Excellent
What a terrific write. So very well done.
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ooooh this was a cool poem! i liked it
"fear feeds upon your soul and mind"... loved this line!
great work!!!!! awesome job
thank ya for entering!!!!!
huggggggglezzzz,
adria!!!!!!
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weird but i liked it, wasnt too short and it wasnt too long. thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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he did steal all I am... nice write!
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This is excellent!
I love the word choice, and asking me if seemingly was a word now makes sense.
Your image is well created and very creepy.
Thank you for entering my contests and good luck
Shari
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