A blonde sweet youth, until that night
When he held me, without a fight
He took a gift meant just for love
And slaughtered that impeccant dove
Alone was I, too deep in sorrow
But you came to me, and bid me follow
Nine months we fought a kindled fear
But the time was close, as it drew near
You brushed my cheek with your warning
Shallow, was I, so soft and naive
Who would have questioned that look in your eye
Well, after listful words, how could I?
For we have choked a hidden glance,
Built upon a lost romance
I had the most persistant glow
But yet, how could I ever know?
A child was born that hallow's night
The moonshine such a blazing light
You swore to me that you would tend
No bind to you, but you'd pretend
I left her in your loving care
How could I know what I was to bare
But love is a foolish dance and game
I had not put a test to shame
Hours passed and a baby's cry
Was heard no more, no more that night
A remembered flaw in your dark soul
The child was yours, well now we know
So vengeance is all I seek on you
You should fear this, it's a mother's truce
To a baby killed from your watch
But my love, that was your botch.
Author notes
The story is about a young woman who was raped. The man ran off and left her behind, pregnant. Soon, a young man comes into her life and tries to help her feel loved again. Little did she know he really was the man who did the wrongdoing and the only reason he wanted to be around her was because he didn't want any trace of what had happened that night....including the baby, which he kills. Now she is seeking vengeance upon him.
A contest entry
- Dark Picture Inspiration by Frodofan.
575 points, ended February 6, 2009, 9 entries
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Comments
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Wow. I agree with Frodofan, it is scary and stirring.
I love the language choices you make, and your rhyme seems unforced and natural. You do need the author notes to clear up the narrative, but that's fine. I like to story you tell, this is a good piece
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I was definently a littel confused about what was going in your poem, but the author's notes cleared it up. You might want to try to make it clearer in your piece though. It's an interesting story. Very scary and stirring. It could definently be elaborated on for a longer narrative.
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