from the fifth floor
I could feel his white sheets
lift in the wind ~
they blew in an unsusal shape
allowing me to see his world
across the sigh of indifference
and I wondered ~
should I fly
Author notes
37 words
A contest entry
- 37 words by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended January 28, 2009, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The way you describe the sheets makes me think of clouds and how everyone can see different shapes.
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This is absolutely beautiful
Love the vivid imagery written within.
It's a great piece of poetry, love the ending.
Best to you in all you do.
tony
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How do you come up with these things, such a romantic notion in these lines. I was left with a sigh and one word. Yes. She should fly. Beautiful. Best to you in the contest
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beautifully done
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softly read with a tender image.. beautifully written, best of luck in the contest.
Angel
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