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Rivers Flowing

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Deep within me there is an urge
one that makes the rivers surge.
Rambling throughout as streams
thoughts flow endlessly it seems.

Connecting waters that intersect
fond memories, soothing reflect.
Forming eddies as whirl pools
catching droplets, crystallized jewels

Words written upon the sea beds
wash out to sea knowledge spreads
Sitting  as the rivers runs by me
under the shade of a big oak tree.

My head is full of things to say
But they can wait for another day
Waves dance about as they sway,
Like the waters that end in the bay.

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Prompt Oh God ! How do you make rivers flowing towards the oceans...Unknown.

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  • lefthanded
    February 4

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    When I was 17 I read in an encyclopedia that poetry is the noble expression of noble emotion. You take me back to those days again.

    The last stanza reflects to me the feeling of every poets who loves this art.

    My head is full of things to say
    But they can wait for another day
    Waves dance about as they sway,
    Like the waters that end in the bay

    how can anything else beat that longing and desire?

    I saw a typo on the second line of the first stanza and i think the article "the" should be removed and replaced with "that".

    a splendid write. Keep it up.


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    January 30

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    gorgeous write. the rhyming scheme you penned is superb. the imagery is stunning, too and your words match it. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • thepoetssoul
    January 30
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    Love the picture you added

  • A-muse-in-writer
    January 27

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    Wow

    I love the imagery and the rhyming couplet form. Very well done


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 25

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    I like the image of the life you took to make this prompt a real one and this is why it is very natural and very heart touching as well..well done..


  • thepoetssoul
    January 24

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    Beautiful poem...
    Love the imagery and visuals your words provide.
    The rhythm and rhyme in this piece is very good.
    It dances on the edge of brilliant, well done.
    Thanks for sharing your poetic talent.

    Tony

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