just once more around,
into the bluish-green of billiards and
pointed (oh-so-accusatory) darts,
swimming in nausea and xanax,
friends laughter accentuated
in 3-D,
what is this place
that has stripped me
of my faculties
a smile or two,
a quarter or three,
and now this situation
has become dangerous
as shots lead to blurriness
and sensibilities are ruled by
the best route home,
sudden harshness stuns me, then
neon salvation leaves me forgetful
of the flickering sin overgrown on his hands,
a stumble into the foliage,
we have spilled into his zipper,
cast upon unforgiving cement
that stamps its place on placid thighs
we drink fornication from a fast-flowing faucet,
it grinds the mental gears dull,
the game has turned from lust to wet
and now there is no more illusion,
reality is forced-fed from a barbie glitter-spoon,
and the girl you were is gone
finally,
totally,
lost
Author notes
whispernthedark
The poem we reviewed at random was "The Stumble and Pick Me Back Up". your entry must be 32 lines and your theme is "Atomic Jaeger-Bombs".
The random word list:
1. Salvation
2. Foliage
3. Neon
4. Hands
5. Drink
6. Stumble
7. Grinds
8. Forgetful
9. Spilled
10. Zipper
11. Wet
12. Game
13. Flickering
14. Overgrown
15. Sin
Good luck!
Bean & Loki
In a list
A contest entry
- Word Bank with a Lime Twist by Bean Sidhe.
1000 points, ended February 8, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Ohhh, I personally loved this entry. The subject matter tastes like dirty pretty to me, without the added punctuation and trippy formatting.
I really liked where you took the theme of "Atomic Jaeger Bombs" and appreciate the fact that you utilized all of your words in the provided word bank.
I also dig the stretches of alliteration, specifically, in "fornication from a fast-flowing faucet".
But the line "reality is forced-fed from a barbie glitter-spoon" has got to be my personal favorite.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest!
-Bean -
I agree with Bean that this had a very DP feel to it. The word usage was done well and the flow of the poem was good. I like how you took the theme and ran with it. Nicely done.
Løki
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