Such fine potential for apple pie,
apple crisp, apple of my eye ~
apple brown with age, quickly
like nurse-ready teat ~
apple shrink and crinkle
leaving faces of angst.
I pare them,
wanting a red ribbon,
whole and unbroken
as if, I could take
anything
back.
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This was poignant and very endearing. I relate.
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You will always be beautiful.
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I like all the parts, but I have to say that the whole is a bit choppy. The words are lovely, but the flow could be a bit smoother.
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Wonderful metaphors.. I loved:
I pare them,
wanting a red ribbon,
whole and unbroken
as if, I could take
anything
back.
Great write!
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ahhh... this is the experience in engaging imagery and the wonderful meanings, so much a metaphor for all that we do with our care and effort in life... remarkable simplicity and depth...PK
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So poignant, lovely. This part really got me:
"I pare them,
wanting a red ribbon,
whole and unbroken
as if, I could take
anything
back."
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