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Delight of Love ...(Sonnet 1)

Between you both I flicker, your eyes gaze,
Music plays softly, though only I hear
I dance amongst your love's enchanted haze
With gentle whispers, you say "I love you"
Your hands clasp, bringing you both ever near
Such beauty has graced my table for two

Your anniversary of wedded bliss
The fizz, as champagne pours in crystal flutes
An aroma of passion as lips kiss,
Your love for each other, so true I see
My flame smiles warmth, as you both I salute
This delight of love you have shared with me

Such beauty has graced my table for two
This delight of love you have shared with me



Author notes

written from the Point of view of a candle

~ Cornish Sonnet ~

The form consists of two, three couplets stanzas and a refrain made up of the first line of each stanza.
A. b. a. c. b. c.... D. e. d. f. e. f.... A. D.
As an alternative, the last line can be used and gives a rhyme pattern of
a. b. a. c. b. C.... d. e. d. f. e. F.... C. F.
Although purists state all sonnets should be Iambic Pentameter, any meter or line length may be used, as long as all the lines are of similar length and meter.

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    March 3

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    Thank you for your entry

    A unique perspective. That of the candle viewing the romance between two people. I think you could have also compared aspects of the couple to the candles flame. As it is this is a beautiful poem. Great imagery.

    The form was done well, the syllable count was correct and the rhyme scheme was well developed. Nice flow and rhythm.

    I encouage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    You have been chosen to proceed to the next round. Once the next round contest is up you will receive a link to that contest.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • maralisa silver member
    January 24

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    aw a adorable veiw of a candle your imagery resinates the candle light so beautifully I realy loved this sonnet thank you for sharing maralisa

  • SimplySonnets gold member
    January 24

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    enjoyed, lovely imagery

    I never worry, to much about the technical details, the purist are wrong to place any restriction on the poetic art form. all the great poets, worked with the conventions, but still recognised the genius when they were ignored.Your sonnet, is refreshing and the imagery effective and what a smashing idea.

    Your love for each other, so true I see
    My flame smiles warmth as you both I salute

    Is a delight, write number two soon, Shakespear wrote 152, go for it.---Thank you. Ray


  • Melodies
    January 24

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    Ah, cleverness and beauty mixed to create a a lovely sonnet of a kind I am seeing for the first time. Well penned, good poet.

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