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Promise

The way guns kill people,
she whispers to herself,
the razor's to blame for the scars.
If the blade would stop mocking her,
she vows in the darkness,
she'd never hurt herself again.

She lies.

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  • StarEyes
    January 24

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    WOW! There is so much emotion in this one. Some promises are made to be kept, while others are made to be broken...

    This is heartwrenching. Great job!


  • shecantstopfalling.
    January 24

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    I like the first two lines. Stroke of genius, those lines.

    And you're Author Notes made me laugh


    • Avalanche.Echo
      January 25
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      Thank you.

      What about the other five lines?


      • shecantstopfalling.
        January 25
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        haha. The other five lines were awesome to, I just meant those first two were my favourite

        • Avalanche.Echo
          January 27
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          Oh, I get it. *feels stupid*
          Heh, I'd thought that by saying the first two lines were good that you were really saying the rest sucked without actually saying it


  • PuRfekly-Phlaw3d
    January 24

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    i like this, it really good,
    you should leave it how it is..
    so much emotion in so little words
    it's perfect.

    • Avalanche.Echo
      January 24
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      Thank you.

      Wow, a rough draft that came out well on the first try... that's gotta be some sort of record for me.

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