scales fall from my eyes
black hearts bleed
scorn never died peacefully
those fights of ancient lies
can not let us go
Deaths grips tightly
to a faded past
no longer exists
only here- now
future is
separate in time
but your cold fingers
are tightly bound
about my neck
Author notes
No need for explination you know what this says.
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What is one thing that stood out in this poem?
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I want to highlight the whole poem since I can relate to everything you wrote here in the wonderful dark write of emotions
those fights of ancient lies
can not let us go
but this is the line that sticks out the most for me since lies always seem to leave us bitter and never quite ready to forgive and move on
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I like the imagery in this poem but also the langauge, the personification of death and scorn. One of my favorite lines is 'scorn never died peacefully,' that really stuck out in my mind.
I love this poem!
Rachael
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Thank you for such an amazing comment, I'm not sure if you're a dark reader or not but I have quite a collaboration of all types of poems. I'd be more than happy to direct you to a few of them if you wish to read. thank you for stopping by and reading my work! I shall return the favour shortly.
Aaron
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hell yeah! im so happy i stumbled here, this is absolutely brilliant. bravo!
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dang... Powerful profound words spoken.
It is hard to shake off the past...
Delila
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It doesn't sound to me at all as if you're tainted. You seem a little lost in the past and unsure of the future and jaded by love. That doesn't make you tainted, it makes you a . . . poet. And a very good one.
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Gripping
A fascinating write that speaks
poignantly on so many levels.
Emotions run on overdrive as
reflections of a shadowed past
loom like gray clouds before a rain.
Nicely done
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I'm not quite sure why I like this but I do. I've come back several times now to re-read it, because I couldn't quite figure out what about it makes me like it. And I think I might finally know.
When I read this I look past the words, past the feeling, past the emotion. I see something different I think, that no one else sees, like an alternate hidden poem within this one. One with a different set of emotions and feelings. Not quite sure how that works though.
The other reason why I like this is because I can relate. But then again, who can't relate to this?
An awesome piece of poetry my friend, the sad thing is is that sometimes feeling bad is the only way to write good poetry.
(Sorry for the rambling, I ramble when I watch House
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Love the title it goes so well! This was a great write good sir! I hope all is well! xoxo Miranda
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The last lines of this were particularly haunting and well done, as well as "scorn never died peacefully." The imagery is lovely, and you brought out the emotion you wanted to express with a lot of strength. Really great write, and I hope you're feeling better now!
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wow....i hope you feel better now. this is a haunting poem..but also a hidden beauty.
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Sometimes lies of the past, those murmured by others, can taint a reputation longer than any. This feels like a conflicted feeling about one once loved, one whose powers just bring a person to their knees, even when we think we have strength to pass them over. You capture a beautiful melody, even in the sadness of your words, there are always two futures, the one full of should have, would have, could haves. And the future that you take the time to make. Chin up friend. Best to you
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Thank you for your kind words...Just been frustrated as all hell lately and in the process of Moving to colorado and dealing with some other issues and had some built up emotions that needed a good writing and felt much better after doing so.
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You are getting VERY strong in using metaphor. Very very talented poet here.
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Thank you!
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Well whatever it is that is troubling you, I certainly hope that it is solved for you soon.
Gaylene
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Thank you so much Gaylene, and thank you even more for reading my poetry!
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Hugs
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Hey bro! Sorry to read that you are going
through some rough times right now. I wish you all the best and hope that things turn around for
you very soon! Take care!
Jeremy0826
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I wouldn't say "rough" times it's just stressful situation lol only makes us stronger yes?
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only here- now
future is
separate in time
so wise
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Thank you dear, it's greatly appreciated!
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Sigh... No explanation at all, what we hope has left us sometimes stays as a collar we can never get rid of, but through it all you are better and rise above it hun. Chez
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Thanks hun, I feel 'tainted' in reading this poem...like it's just there... so much emotions bottled within a broken spirit sometimes...not saying that I'm broken but you get the idea..
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Such emotion exhibited in this piece, with very few words. This is powerful my friend. You have amazing talents! Thank you for sharing with us ^.^
♥ Katie
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thanks hun, been stressed lately and feel all kind of emotions just swarming under my skin...
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I am so sorry, you are in my prayers my friend. Seems many including myself have been stressed lately. Must be a bug going around...:/ all will be well though, just takes a little faith I am always here to talk to/be a shoulder to lean or cry on! lolz
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