I like to share a boyhood story that’s true
A trio we were, a sad motley crew
It was Mark & me and my brother Andrew
We were set for the night, with a dubbie and brew.
The night had started without a glitch
Mark was driving and I sat bitch
So here we sat all three in the front
When to my right comes a cannabis blunt.
The bone was past with me in the middle
And before I knew it I found me a riddle
Mark, I proclaimed, I must be High
Because to my right I thought Andrew sat by
Mark slams on the brakes, my head hits the glass.
What the hells going on I thought I should ask.
Marks yells to me, I do not know how far
But somewhere Andrew fell out of the car.
Rolling and tossing and bumping I cry
Terrifying moment, I thought he might die
Out of the car, I ran down the street
There was Andrew looking all beat.
I heard him giggle as he struggled to stand
Much to my amazement, Joint still in his hand
I asked what the hell happened I need you to tell.
Thought we were parked, opened door and just fell.
We should have learned a lesson that night
But being a teen and not being too bright
We tied Andrew in the back seat to stay
And started our journey again the next day.
©Dannyurato 2009
A contest entry
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Lol... what an amusing poem, a delightful story, and so well written. I remember those days of my teen youth (yep, I actually remembr them) but in my day it was all about beer parties and in retrospect, it's a wonder I survived.
Thanks for such a cool write
Dee
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Thank you
Yea it is a wonder how we survived our stupid years ha ha ha. thank you so much for such a nice comment. i am so glad you enjoyed it
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Great poem, i too have done stupid stuff before maybe not that extreme as to falling out of the car while moving.haha but atleast you can look back and get a kick out of it.
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Thank you very much mamaliz23
I am so glad to have made you laugh. I appreciate your comments. Please feel free to let others have a read and share the laugh.
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hahahahaha....oh this is just great!
Brings back memories...
This is really funny, with a care-free touch to it which makes it really beautiful...the tales of yesterdays.
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Thanks icyrose
I am surprised I survived the 70s ha ha ha ha. The dumb things we did as kids. Thank you for your nice words. Please share the poem with a friend.
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hahaha!
this is amzing ..although the last two lines din rhyme his was awesome !!!!
good luck with this
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Thank you Glad
I really appreciate you critique. I will be a better writer because of your honesty
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wonderful poem
wonderful flow of words, you have rhyem.. You no the words to say, because you have a wonderful way with words. And it was a pleasure to read your poem. I can identify with the blunt you see. -
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Ohhhhhh you can indentify huuuuuu!!!
lol, thank you for stopping by and telling how much you enjoyed the poem. Your awesome
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Ha ha!!! Very amusing...ah the antics of youthful days.
Love the lines....
"I heard him giggle as he struggled to stand
Much to my amazement, joint still in his hand
I asked what the hell happened I need you to tell.
Thought we were parked, opened door and just fell"
A wonderful write, enjoyed the laugh..thanks.
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Thank you Anne
You are so amazing. You are always here to say something nice and you are so supportive. I just love you.
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I laughed through most of this until you said he fell out of the car...then you made it funny again...(that was cruel...but really good) Reread lines 6, 12, 14, and 18....you misspelled some things...but once again....way to go with keeping me on my toes.
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Thank you so much
I now see the mistakes. Thank you so much for caring enough to share your thoughts. I wish i was able to make corrections. But i do see them. You are awesome.
Lots of Love,
Danny
UPDATE! I figured out how to correct those mistakes from a friend (Jesaan) that has taken me under wing.
Thank you again StormyDawn!
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