If you could see me, look into my eyes.
You could see I know what it means to die.
But if you knew it would be no surprise
for I had left that which only flies.
Things of dust and fantasy, I have left behind.
The thing that they call love, I have found unkind.
The light they claim, really a shrieking dark.
The riches they declare are found in empty hearts.
I would know, I have seen and I believed it so.
Similar knowledge I thought I had, but I didn’t know.
The warmth that I had sought really left me cold.
Chasing youth and foolish dreams left me feeling old.
Yet the place where I die is also where I live,
for what lives in my heart, lives that I might give.
Yes, my act against that life, a kind of insurrection.
But then such deaths can lead to a kind of resurrection.
I died to the past and things of men, wanting much of me,
and rose to One, the maker of all that I could clearly see.
It seems He had known me, while I knew Him not.
Came with fire and clean water, to wash away my blot.
When He called, I had to come. No place is left for me.
His chain of love on my heart, made me to be free.
Before this One eternal God, I am barely born.
Time and youth is nothing, old loves I now scorn.
It must seem, though I’m still here, my choice is like I’m leaving.
But one can only leave for things that they are seeing.
Where He guides, He provides. I see it for myself.
The One who commands greater things, gives much greater help.
So if you care to come and fight this fight with me,
take His chain o’ heart. Let it make you free.
Our time here is where we’ll heed His call.
We await for higher things, ascend to greater halls.
1-23-09
A contest entry
- Encouragement for a Soldier ~ quote inspired by Xianaria.
900 points, ended February 10, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Deeply moving & thought out, thank you for entering!
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wow
I believe so many of us should listen to that Calling. It would bring more peace into this world. Even through the calliing isn't an easy choice to follow. It better for them. and us
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a good poem
we await for higher things....
a well written poem
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Well written, very smooth flow. I find myself coming back to line 4 " for I had left that which only flies." Maybe my metaphor bone is broken, It's been a while since I've read, but I can't seem to figure that one out. "Before this One eternal God, I am barely born." Would have to be my favorite line. Great poem and please take no offense from my ignorance.
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that is an inspiring poem with great detail, please keep up the writing
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very good
Yep! That's the way it works.
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WOW :)
This is really good very emotional. very well worded,
overall what can be said but WOW
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Great write! Well-written. I love it.
"Yet the place where I die is also where I live,
for what lives in my heart, lives that I might give.
Yes, my act against that life, a kind of insurrection.
But then such deaths can lead to a kind of resurrection."
Keep writing.
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This is the truth
And so well put. He will take us just like we are. No complaints, just come as you are and He will tend to thee...mac -
This is the truth
And so well put. He will take us just like we are. No complaints, just come as you are and He will tend to thee...mac
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This is really good very emotinal. i love your words
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wonderfully written love the part....Yet the place where I die is also where I live,
for what lives in my heart, lives that I might give.
Yes, my act against that life, a kind of insurrection.
But then such deaths can lead to a kind of resurrection.
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striking
you have great depth in your words, and much emotion, you speak of both sad and joyous things. in the loss of a love you have found a new path and a new guidence. this is a very good piece and i wish you luck in your contest. -
Wow.
I like this a bunch.
You're really good with words.
"When He called, I had to come. No place is left for me.
His chain of love on my heart, made me to be free."
That part was especially brilliant.
Great write.
Keep writing.
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