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Goodbye My Love


Darkness had slowly descended
The moon’s eye opened voluminous
Stars glistened from above
As water smashed the riverbank

Hand in hand they walked the shore
Gazing, one upon the other
While water menacingly rolled in
Removing all trace of their prints

Love has never been more defined
Amidst such a perfect night

A tall, dark, stranger approached
Demanding all that they had

With eyes blazing denial
Hunter refused all but his wallet
While firmly gripping his pocket

But knowing his time would soon be up
As signified by Coast Guard horns
The stranger released a trigger

Slowly Hunter fell by the shore
A smile still graced his lips
And his hand held firmly to his pocket

As he fell, a diamond engagement ring
Gently rolled out of his pocket
Though breathing his last breath
He placed the ring on her finger
But death came knocking
Before he could pop the question

Tears stained her pallid cheeks
As she cried, “Goodbye my love”
And holding the ring skyward
“Yes, I will, I will”, she screamed
Hoping he could hear her answer
Before he was taken from her forever



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  • Valley Girl silver member
    January 31

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    OMG! I AM IN TEARS! Wow! the imagery, the cruelty! I was drawn to every word! Brilliant piece! Best of luck in the contest.


  • Valley Girl silver member
    January 23
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    Your name is Hunter.