Imprisoned inside his own sealed box
struggling
to suck in the fresh air
through the cracks of life
pushing
on the walls of despondent emotions
not being able to break through
scratching
on the barrier of ruminations
pleading for that sweet release
wanting
the tranquility he now thinks is
nonexistent
Author notes
I do not claim the pictures used with this write as my own. Pictures found on google images and flickr.com
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Oooooooooooooooh~
Oy! Me having a deja-vu
Should I say ditto - Okies ditto to my last comment but again Powerful words and without picture- Your verse takes the reader right there~
Excellent as always
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Omg!
How did you know?
Reading this stunningly poignant
piece was like looking into a mirror.
Striking! Dark! Captivating!
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niice work you dig it. this have defness in iit hon i really like this and it gave its on one sound that is what have me impressed i like this
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Depression and despair take a terrible toll, very good write.
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WOW!!! This is so great. Such a deep write and the picture is perfect. Wonderful job Cocoa.
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i love it
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Great mood piece
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Excellent!!
very powerful write lady, it even 'feels' tense..i really like this my friend!!
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THOUGHT PROVOKING and filled with truth and emotion!
This is a feeling I think that all of us have had at one time or another - and a feeling I often get on Monday as I walk into work for the vibes are not good there - and with the economy the way that it is - they are getting worse and worse all of the time. Every week heads are rolling and the ones that are left keep getting more weight put on there shoulders - and are trapped in a box that they cannot escape from - as there is no place else to go. It is hard to find tranquility with the weight of the world dragging you down and the walls closing in.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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Very easy to relate to, pain, desperation, feeling trapped with no way out, all of this oozes from this piece.
Good write.
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Very nicely done. This poem easily describes my feelings over the past few years. I can relate to it very well. Great job.
Mike
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Wow, this is such a great thought for this picture!
I love how you brought it to life through your words. I think that this is a place that we have all been to in our lives. For whatever reason or reasons that we hold, life can be so frustrating and difficult at times. Brilliant work here my friend!
Jeremy0826
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Wow!
Whew that is some box. This is great. Such a fantastic write. Best of luck in the contest.
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