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[ My morning ]

My morning
Is the time of
Darkness. Yours
May be light, yes,
But mine rises black
From the sometime
Swamp in the corner
Of night.

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  • Judith Chandler
    February 8
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    I have had a few times when my morning was like that, like the other day when the whole building was roused by a fire alarm. After it was over, I decided to stay up and have a coffee and just sit. It's an interesting experience though it's not my routine.

    Liked your write.


  • chills gold member
    January 25
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    For some reason, I find this awfully scary. Swamp in the corner of night......


  • MargaretG
    January 24

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    I like that image, as I also rise in darkness. I'm looking forward to spring, when I don't have to wait so long for the sun.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    January 24
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    Strong image presented.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    January 23

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    Wow, I love the philosophical/metaphysical implications of this poem. Thanks for sharing it with us.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 23

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    Very nicely done. I like this. You have chosen your words well and created agreat piece for all its brevity. Good luck in the contest.
    ♥ Touchof1der

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