[[turn off all the lights in my mind]]
it’s getting crowded in here between all my minds & feelings & hearts.
Baby you fucked rationality right out of my psyche, & I can’t even
control my ohsoscrewed emotions anymore.
Don’t ask about what I feel inside;; I have the mind of a b r o k e n
porcelain doll & all the personality of an actress [[who knows?]]
The doctor said the pills would (hold-me-together) like God knows you
promised to [when you were really with her]. Because I know you had
to have been.
Rainbow colored pills are s=l=i=d=i=n=g down my throat, but my dinner
is coming back up [all 200 calories of it]. I make believe I can purge
away all my chaste confusion over all the things you made me do
[& you say you didn’t with… someone else]
But my s/a/n/i/t/y ‘s c|r|a|c|k|e|d & s h a t t e r e d like all my
raging hearts;; in heartbreak, love & confusion, I cling to you
because I don’t know where else to go. Mood swings, diagnoses,
& seventeen years, I’m the virginXwhore dirty pretty is made of.
Fuckup princess on a mission to find the blood in her veins, all these
tattered emotions are tearing apart my too-prominent ribcage like
you’re battering my hipbones.
When I said I was yours I meant it,
but I didn’t say you’d get me (whole)
&hearts
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thoughts?
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Holy hell.
This is absolutely amazing.
Left me speechless, to be honest. -
The pain and sorrow is so clear as I move from line to line to figure out the story inbetween the lines. But I get the feeling it goes much deeper into a whole new level of emotions that are dark and haunting. Anger and tears a mixed picture of many colors!!!
Great Write!!!
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wow thats actually really good.
could you read mine to?
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I can now understand why you get tons of comments and I don't
you are one heck of a 'feeling' writer, and if I could I would, but I can't and I can only but try modern trends, and try to be part capable in this style of writing.
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amazing
this is beautiful. i can totally relate and my favorite parts are "I’m the virginXwhore dirty pretty is made of.
Fuckup princess on a mission to find the blood in her veins"
and
"When I said I was yours I meant it,
but I didn’t say you’d get me (whole)"
i guess those are the parts i relate to most, too
anyway, this poem is simply amazing!
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this was beautifully written.
it really show'd alot of emotion
& i like that
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awww this breaks my heart sweetie. I know how you feel here, I've been treated badly by a guy and god knows, I find it so hard to cope with sometimes. Oh & if you want to make the hearts you have to add a semi colon at the end ; &hearts ; without the space between the s and the ;. Love it sweetie, keep it up.
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thanks &hearts
and no I wasn't trying to do the heart, I realized after I wrote it that it looked like I was :/
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great
loved it
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Shit this is freaking perfection!!.
everything about this just screamed DirrtyPretty.
I have to say i'm sorry you are like this but i will also add that you make fucking amazing poems.
excellent!
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wow, talk about creepy
Exactly the way i've been feeling(minus the pills part)
I hope your soul isn't this broken.
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