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girl

obsessive thoughts,
dangerous addictions,
a pretty face,
a deadly secret,
lonely days,
miserable nights,
alone in time,
voices heard,
can not comfort,
this girl,
whos breaking down,
piece by piece,
tear by tear,
cut by cut,
no need to belong,
lovers arms,
so far away,
no one can save,
this little girl,
so desperate to love,
so desperate to feel,
yet feels nothing.

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  • TJ Becker
    January 23, 2009
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    awesome

    I normally don't like poems chopped into words like this one. I prefer sentences, but this was so well done. Even though you took short pieces and put them together, it flowed and made sense. good write