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I will break the silence.

~Doll~
I will break the silence.
My lips will part and my whispers
will pick the right lock.

~Time~
No such, thing.
My kiss will keep you numb,
submerged in forbidden waters.

~Doll~
I will stir beneath the undergrowth,
clean the dust with my broken hands,
walk from frigid shadows.

~Time~
Don't breathe lies, my lovely, you are mine
I claimed you once, twice, thrice into infinity,
my hands will never let go.

~Doll~
I'll wake, my shattered body whole once again.
The sun will set my clockwork heart
back in motion.

~Time~
You're blind, precious child.
You swim in me, I invade you.
My cobwebs will keep your heart dead.

~Doll~
I will rise,
draw and entwine memories in a spirit,
walk the Earth as human.

~Time~
You play with illusions, hollow emotions.
I will rain on your parade.
Your mind will rust and your joints will break.

~Doll~
And yet I will transcend all.
Music from my body will sway the world.
Colors in my eyes will paint its heart.

~Time~
You shall not...
I hold you and your power.
Every moment, every second, every heartbeat are my spell.

~Doll~
Time and time, I will break your spell.
I will walk through you until you fall,
through mirrors and fall in my grave. 
 

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  • Blue Rew silver member
    January 26

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    Toys, time...
    what it really says to me is inanimation, complacency and the passing of life.
    You use this form to its full measure and I enjoyed
    the exchange, the brilliance of the metaphor chosen. I like the fight when shadows surround.

    Now, my suggestions and they are only that, never compromise your work for someone else's style~

    Heart is noticed here several times (heart, heart, heart, heartbeat)

    "draw and entwine memories in a spirit"....
    consider 'into' instead of in a for flow

    "through mirrors and fall in my grave"...
    consider "through mirrors fall into grave"

    Very minor and yet, I feel they will impact the
    flow greatly. I have to comment that this forms
    suits you. Blue


    • DayDreamMuse
      January 27
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      Small but essential. I can easily do the flow issues, but alas the heart is something I can't fix as easily, but in the end I wanted to emphasize on it, so I think the work here is done correctly. Thank you nonetheless. Your insight is always welcome here.