You held me in your arms,
So lean, so warm and strong,
As I dreamed of yellow kisses,
In the cornfields, all day long,
Your eyes shinned golden hues,
Like the corn on a summer day,
Covered by humid clouds,
Blocking the sunshine’s way,
Suddenly your eyes grew dark,
Scorching with crystal black,
Disappearing in a field’s grey,
I knew you wouldn’t come back,
The cornfield now lies dry,
Like my love deprived heart,
I watched summer love walk by,
I watched love fall apart.
Author notes
I'm sorry this isnt very good, I had to force it out. My writers block is getting in the way 
Hope you like it 
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I agree but this is not the end..it comes and goes..and it comes back again..this is cycle of this life..but you are very true at the momment..
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Your eyes shinned
***Did you mean "your eyes shined"...?
Well, I suffer from writer's block regularly, so I understand. Your imagery is good, especially for a rhyming poem, but the rhyme does feel a bit forced to me. At least you were able to write something. I hope the poetic wheels start turning more easily for you.
Thanks for entering.
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Stunning.
Your ability to create such images and atmosphere is phenomenal.
A magical write, with a chilling twist.
Another real winner!
x
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5th line is 'shined' - what an amazing write, you continue to surprise me with your vocabulary and capacity to create such pictures with your words.
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