refined, but sometimes coarse
jagged around the edge
to the point of brutality
when it should be smooth and gentle
as the rays of moonbeams
on ocean’s calm, and
like breeze of awareness
there are times when its core
is approximate
with lingered uncertainty
or exactness,
as in harsh and unforgiving -
a thundering of waves
refined or harsh,
its brittleness is evident
in mind
and in deed
Author notes
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This is really deep. Awesome Job!
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Hekate
I do not think that you have visited before - thank you for your time and comment. Frans
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The processes of nature all have their own pace to ensure events take place in the exact right time. We often reluctantly change pace and prefer to remain on cruise control, which is just an other man-made device invented to provide an knavish type of comfort out of sync with nature's evolutionary speeds and methods. We will learn anyway - emphatically or the hard way if needed. Thank you for creating and sharing this eloquent poetical view. Take care,
Chris
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It's good
to hear from you again Chris. I enjoyed your comment - it added to the gist of the poem. Hope you are well? Blessing. Frans
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The essence of the matter is the "core" (the heart, the soul) of man. For me, finding the full spectrum of character is as simple as looking in a mirror.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Thanks you Leo
for adding your comments, which I always appreciate. Frans
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The contradictions you make along are all very strong and impose a certain degree of duality that I think transcends metaphor.
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Thank you
for your kind comment. I appreciate this. Blessings to you. Frans
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Life can be so complex we can drown or get lost within its uncertainty. It can swallow us up like the sea. Your comparioson to the sea is wonderful. The imagery stunning as always. Nice title too. You take care dear friend, Hugs and Smiles.
Blessings to you,
Sandy
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Good morning Sandy
Wonderful to hear from you. Thank you for taking time to comment. It may not be the best of poems, but I enjoyed where it took me. Hugs and blessings. Frans -
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Ah. Good Morning to you, Frans!
I came to see whether there is any new poems from the pen of my friend, the Professor Poet, FransB.
I love your core poems. Have a wonderful day!
Groetnis hier vanuit Eden, George.
Myra
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They have often said that the ocean is the hardest mistress in it's changing attitudes and that mankind can be akin to this is very well said here. The complexities of life and how we cannot change nature but in our minds nothing is impossible. C
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Thanks
for always being so kind as to read and comment on my poems. I so enjoy the 'thoughts' you add. Blessings to you. Frans
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I really like this, Frans! I like the ocean as a metaphor describing mankind and his complexities. The 3rd stanza needs a minor adjustment: time needs to be plural. Still, this wonderful piece flows much like the sea's rhythm, great imagery and sound. Excellent writing, dear one!
Luv & hugs, BonnieQ
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BonnieQ
Thanks for the comments. How I got that plural incorrect I do not know! I 'is' so stupid! Blessings to you. Frans
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Once again ...
nature is at the base of your poem. And like nature, man too is plagued by the mortal imperfections of harsh, of uncertainty and unforgiveness ... yet even in its brittleness, the core remains core.
Love to you, Friend. Thank you for a textured poem, in content and in structure, with its interesting end words of opposites.
Myra
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Your comments
are appreciated. Human relations are at the core of humankind - its brittleness provides growth. Blessings. Frans
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