In a forest deep and vast
Where songs of birds play
Under green roofed rooms of life
Where concerns can never stay.
My eyes glimmer and flicker
With galaxies and tendrils of light
I sigh at the ending of day
As the forest whispers of night.
Author notes
"I don't like chickens" as per request.
A contest entry
- ALL OR NOTHING! short and to the point poems! by eternitydemon.
492 points, ended January 23, 14 entries
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a wonderful peek into the forest...nice natural imagery painted with your words. Very well done.
Rory
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why would you sigh at the end of the day sleep is the best you get to get away from life on less you are like me and have nightmares on top of nightmares you wrote a great poem here keep up the great work
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I enjoyed this lively, inspiring write. It felt smooth and fast paced yet earthy and filled with good imagery.
AsIThink...
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wow!!! this is a beautiful poem!!! this amazing fantasy image of the forest is painted in my mind. a truly excellent job here. this really should have placed/
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thank you for entering
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the best poem i have read
adored this, what a beautiful and peaceful scene you have set up here, one in which i could do with being today, this is so simple yet full of images
*under green roofed rooms of life
where concerns can never stay"
what a brilliant way of describing a woodland and the peace is there it made me sigh then lean forward, i wanted it to be longer it ended to fast, that is how good this is,
"as the forest whispers of night"
a dreamy line almost romantic, beaytifuul poem, great flow, rhyme in perfect order
very well done on this one, the best by far i have read on this site today
thanks for sharing
white
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The forest comes alive with your imagery here, and your rhyming and flow is very good....It is just long enough to leave an impact. Wishing you well in the contest, nephew...
Aunty
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I love it! It is so rich with unique imagery despite it's length. It is perfect as it is. I usually like longer pieces, and usually can suggest elaboration, but not with this piece. I was completely satisfied with this poem as I read through. I'm a sucker for original and new imagery, and this piece is full of it. Awesome poem, a total joy to read. ^_^
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Another great write brother!
♥ Kathraina
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