I hid words
in your womb
for safe keeping
Incubated Insights
Ignite Lignite seams
In state of mind
To Smoulder
Author notes
Afraid of getting burned
A contest entry
- quickie IV - earth by Salty Hibiscus.
460 points, ended January 22, 2009, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I absolutely love the way this poem is shaped like a swelling belly and 'seams' as the belly button! I enjoy a double meaning too.
KW~
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The words here are fascinatingly obscure to me (my loss?) Perhaps the partial punctuation adds to the confusion. The first three lines appear to be a sentence ending with "keeping". Subsequent lines have first word capitalised but no full stops. The sense then is dissipated because of this.
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great take on the prompt. yeah she is full of surprises, and we should accept whatever she gives us. thanks for sharing and good luck.
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yes. yes, great imagery. though we would spell the word 'smoulder'
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Will defer to continental spelling protocols...
I use french spelling of emarald in one about peacock. If you like, ill find it for you. It is a shaped poem. I like center align for shape. This is shaped too... 'seams' is the belly button.
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well written....
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