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Unadultered Love

"...Idiot
      Unneeded child
  ...Little worm"

"Stop crying
Shut up
Useless little Shit"

"Hey, Bugger
  You stupid boy
    Go grab me a beer"

'Daddy,
  I love you!'

"Go to sleep!"

Can't they see he's bleeding to death?
Crying himself silently to sleep?

...Cause he loves him
  He doesn't want to make Daddy mad again...

He loves Daddy too much to do that.

Author notes

I'll probably revise this. It feels kinda sloppy.

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    February 7

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    Sloppy, but effective.
    I don't think there's a perfect way to show the situation or make people understand.

    This was effective and honest.

    Shari


  • hisaddiction
    January 22
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    its very raw, its good. Sad but good....