for all the time ive lived,
i wanted to say to you,
all the things i had on mind,
you and me will forever be,
by the accedent over a 200 years,
and i want you to know your not alone,
you were never alone,
i want you to see the life we could have,
for we will exist forever,
so why don't we exist together,
love is the thing i'll show,
and mean till internity be,
forever we will be,
and forever i want us to be.
A contest entry
- ALL OR NOTHING! short and to the point poems! by eternitydemon.
492 points, ended January 23, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i think the last 3 lines could be changed.."be" was in this maybe 1 or 2 many times..
other than that it was a great write..
very well done
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Spelling can always be improved but I love the message behind this. It is so cute and so innocent to think that forever is achievable. I hope someone gets there.♥
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and i want you to know your not alone,
you were never alone,
loved the poem doll;these lines stuck out to me, keep up the work and best to you in the contest
Vanna
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thanks for entering
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great write, but check your spelling.
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