My cries lift towards the dark air
Weight of the world is upon my back
I am forever bound by my despair
Forever taking on where others lack
I am alone and alone I cry
Chained by my earthly desires
Darkness prevails and love is nigh
Waiting...for love to come and take me higher
Wherefore have you left me alone?
Wherefore have you forgot?
Wherefore have I fallen, when I could have flown?
Wherefore do I love, and you do not?
Now I am bound, on the inside
Bound forever by your love
Not a single soul in whom to confide
Within a world not thought of
I am alone and alone I cry
Weight of the world upon my back
Emptiness prevails, your love is nigh...
only your love can save me...
Author notes
Prompt from the picture in the border... Picture by Rosie Hardy
Background Copyright Timeless Wisdom aka Raymond Cloud 2009
A contest entry
- Five years of - Prompt by morgana raven.
400 points, ended January 28, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Easy as Pie by Cyanide Dreams.
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Please tell me what you think
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I enjoyed your use of the world, "earthly." It sings on so many different levels - for me its mostly about religion. Letting go of all your earthly desires and you'll be covered by the Lord's grace. I can't remember the exact wording of it.
This is a morbidly beautiful write. It made me think of a lively rose bush with petals a bright lipstick red standing in a dead winter forest under grey cloudy skies. Very inspiring. Good luck in the contest though I'm sure you won't need it. -
i am alone and alone i cry
chained by my earthly desires
darkness prevails and love is nigh
waiting for love to come and take me higher
these lines are out standing . the feelings are really sentimental . such a emotional poem .out standing man. -
Very nice. Thanks to someone that just told me about what the true meaning of wherefore is I got this poem. This is very interesting and I liked the emotion and the word choice in this poem. "Waiting .... for love..." I liked the elipses in this because it makes it even more powerful. You used the prompt very well. good job and good luck in the contest
Josh
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You write with passion and with power ...
and the presentation is beautiful in its starkness of sorrow. Well done, Poet.
Love
Myra
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Thank you my dear myra
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Now I am bound, on the inside
Bound forever by your love
Not a single soul in whom to confide
Within a world not thought of
interesting write.
some of the rhymes seemed a little bit forced, but i enjoyed it.
nice one
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I am alone and alone I cry
Chained by my earthly desires
These lines i love. also - Wherefore do I love, and you do not? and the rhyme previous. Also one of my favourite songs on here. Overall i really liked the feel of the poem. The only thing i have a problem with is how you used the picture as this is already copyright to someone else and I think you need their permission to copyright a background with their work in it. That aside, i really enjoyed this write. Thanks for entering.
Laura -
I clicked on this because I thought it had something to do with the Evanescence song; this is written beautifully. Thank you for sharing!
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