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Tomorrow’s Slogan Today

“Change we can believe in”
Exchange ideas and win
Forever understand
Together hand in hand

Arrange a simple grin
“Change we can believe in”
Allowances will provide
Differences set aside

Religion, sex and race
Origin has no place
“Change we can believe in”
A range of colored skin

Behold a land that's free
We hold these truths to be
Exchange your love within
“Change we can believe in”

 

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Author notes

Quatern poetry usually has eight syllables per line.
I modified this poem to six syllables to match the slogan.

Barack Obama’s slogan: “Change we can believe in”

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  • penman gold member
    February 9
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    Excellent

    So very well expressed. A terrific write. Best of luck in the contest

  • Papagallo
    February 4

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    hey a great poem here. Land of the free and home of the brave. will it all work as we work. after all change is good.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 3

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    Nicely done my dear, I mean, I know squat about the form but it flowed well.

    MJ


  • Rovingone gold member
    January 26

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    An excellent use of the style and a good theme. It is light and yet has a good message that makes so much good sense. It would be nice if there was change like this.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 25

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    Very inspirational. That is the kind of change that is needed worldwide.. I fear that there are too many biased people for it to ever be so.. but we can hope!


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    January 24
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    Nicely done.... one can hope...for that is often all oen has.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    January 24

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    I love this, it is such a simple form but it is so elegent and easy on the eye. I believe in the change too. I hope he can live up to the expectations. Best to you in the contest

  • jadeangyal
    January 23

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    Love how you moved the repeating line through the poem. The rhyming is a little weird because the second syllable of believe is accented, but still a great poem.


  • Ken-Maverick
    January 23

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    An inspirational poem this is and the title is just perfect for it.
    Wonderfully penned here.
    All the best in the contest

    Ken


  • myrataal silver member
    January 23

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    Integrity and trustworthiness ...

    are at the base of this slogan: Change we can believe in. Not sugar-coated, but true. Change is needed to believe, finally.

    Your poetry is powerful AND lyrical. Two good elements to combined. Well done, Amera!

    Thank you for reading my work. I truly appreciate it. It is always good to see you around.

    Love
    Myra


  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    January 23

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    this is awesome. it's great that you made poetry about obama's slogan cuz it's a good one. very nice!

    ~kassie

  • Papagallo
    January 23
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    Sounds Great

    You did lots with "Change we can believe in" All you said is so true, but will it work. It will if people work at it and for it. I am a bit of a skeptic and sadly believe most people will not try. Change is hard to change a nation harder.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    January 22

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    Wow, I'm so impressed with the power of this poem. It's like a beautiful, inspiring speech for all to stand by. You are amazing, Amera!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 22

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    This is beautifully done, a very clever working of an ancient form to fit a modern need.
    Now lets wish him all the luck in the world, because we all need America to get things right!!!

    Great poetry, And I can do the Declaration of Independence too, afterall, it was written by Englishmen

  • Mairi bheag gold member
    January 22

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    Exchange ideas and win...
    Arrange a simple grin...
    A range of colored skin...
    Exchange your love within...

    I love that progression. A simple but clever device.

    "We hold these truths to be..." Even a Brit knows these words - they're true even though you cocky bleeders over the Atlantic said 'em first!

    "We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness..." Yesterday's slogan, but just as rich and good today and tomorrow (I would argue with their assessment of good King George, but that's another matter! )

    Getting back to your poem - it's good work, Sis.


    • Amera gold member
      January 22

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      First of all I am so impressed that you know the words to our Declaration of Independence. I wish I knew as much about Scotland, now I’m going to have to do some research. Next, “cocky bleeders”? I’m not a cocky bleeder; I’m your loyal servant.

      • Mairi bheag gold member
        January 23
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        Our (Scottish) equivalent is the Declaration of Arbroath. Although this document and its words has been seized on by our Nationalists (in reality, petty separatists), it was in fact drafted by a handful or Norman nobs, who vowed to fight to the last 100 Scottish serfs, whether the serfs wanted to or not. A bare few months after drafting the stirring but empty declaration, many of the men who drafted it were found to be traitors, and ended up imprisoned for treason... against Scotland! You are as well not bothering to learn this declaration, Sis.

        Even so, it has taken from 1776 to 2009 for the "self-evidence" of America's wonderful and idealistic Declaration to become more than an ideal, and for someone of mixed ethnic heritage to achieve the country's highest office. I love it when ideals are realised!

        You - my loyal servant? No American has been a "loyal servant" since 1776! YOU are my best ever sister!


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    January 22
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    Another excellent masterpiece my dear sweet sis I love it great work

    • Amera gold member
      January 22
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      You are one of my most loyal readers and I want you to know that I really, really appreciate it. You’re the bestest sister and I love you.


  • StarEyes
    January 22

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    Sis,

    I agree! Every word...perfect! I so hope that we are heading for a change! A change for the better! You summed it up very nicely here! I am standing right there with you!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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