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Unholy Marquis

Washed in white, no blood will flow

Ask me something; Something you would know?
(Unholy)

Be unto thou service for the world

Thou shall the crow service to mankind

(Unholy)

Shall the race be won by mere second

Tou shall not fortify his presence

(Unholy is the Marquis)

 

 

Unholy is the Marquis. Which he has become that of a different stratch. In length he meassures only a million quirks from a body that hasn't even touch romance.

 

 

Unholy is the Marquis in which he does not watch the life be destroyed by itself, and, therefore my friends, is he a sinner to his own thoughts and feelings?

 

 

Unholy is the Marquis in which he has become.

 

 

Unholy is the Marquis in which he wll die.

 

 

(Unholy)

(Unholy)

(Unholy is the Marquis)

(Unholy)

(Unholy)

(Unholy is the Marquis)

(Unholy)

(Unholy)

(Unholy is the Marquis)

 

We....stand still...                                                                                      Behold the Marquis

Oh, Ode to the lives...                                                             What thought have we become

I am everything...                                                                     That we can't even start to see

Simple dreams...                                      (Unholy)      See that we, in the mirror, you will see

Make me feel...                                       (Unholy)  That you, yourself, your friend, everyone

We are Unholy...                          (Unholy is the Marquis)          We are the Unholy Marquis

 

 

From behind a curtain, do you not see that there is no man there? That there is only a mirror that reflects every single damned exact image it sees? That you are the Unholy (Unholy) Marquis? You may think that I am telling you lies but you have not stopped to ask yourself in all truth that perhaps these things such said are true, now have you? Have you? Thou shall the crow whisper in thy ear and tell me that a man has dove for nothing. What do you resolve for? We are one. One One. We are One.

 

Washed in white, no blood will flow

Ask me something; Something you would know?
(Unholy)

Be unto thou service for the world

Thou shall the crow service to mankind

(Unholy)

Shall the race be won by mere second

Tou shall not fortify his presence

(Unholy is the Marquis)

 

(Unholy)

(Unholy)

(Unholy is the Marquis)

 

Unholy is the Marquis.

This is mere fact.

A fact.

Un-able to disprove.

No theory.

And, my friend, Unholy friend.

You can never, never.

Make me feel

Unholy (Unholy) Unholy as the Marquis.

Author notes

Inspired by song and an idea for the creation of Dr. Cube

The story here

http://storywrite.com/story/248398


"A Marquis is the title for someone of a noble stature. Someone who is trustworthy or of noble worthy."

 

"Unholy means not to have a spirit or mind that can be trusted in social or spiritual sense. Someone who does not have a noble stature about them."

 

"Unholy is the Marquis."

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Comments

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  • vex3101
    February 4, 2009
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    i found this very confusing and hard to read try a more simple style to the look of your poem


    • Cube
      February 4, 2009
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      I don't see what was so confusing about it since everyone else was able to read it just fine. It all flows evenly, just not all left alligned.


  • Erozay
    February 3, 2009
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    btw your title u misspelled holy XD


  • Erozay
    January 29, 2009

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    this one was very confusing at first so i had to reread it a few times to understand it and actually read it right but it was good was i figured it out ^_^


  • Emberess
    January 22, 2009

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    Mmmm... I loved the feeling that an ancient religious sect was chanting the "Unholy"'s inside a great cathedral. Lovely, exquisite.


  • Deathless1
    January 22, 2009

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    just read the story, i couldn't comment there.

    i found a few misspellings, i can only remember understand in the second paragraph.

    i loved the story, the car wreck was very hard for me to read.
    emotionally, i have had too many people i care about die that way, never have been in one, but you made me feel like i was.

    i love how it all relates to your identity. very cool that way.

    but one thing pissed me off, don't use pure white any more.
    describe the mask in a different way, like porcelain, or wedding dress white.
    you used it about 5 or 6 times.

    other then that, if was well described.

    great write.

  • Deathless1
    January 22, 2009
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    dark mysteries.
    you can be so spooky some times.
    i do love the song.

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