"Forgive me, Father, for I have sinned."
"Come to me, Child. Confide in me."
It seemed to the Father the Child grinned.
"I seem to be feeling a little hungry,"
Through the grill came crashing an iron fist
Then swiftly followed the knashing teeth
They clamped down tightly on the Father's wrist
The Father stared in disbelief.
"But my child," he cried
"This is quite a blow!"
The Child sighed:
"I know, I know."
"From whence did these feelings start?"
The father made a distraction
A Bible clutched upon his heart;
He paused just for a fraction.
"Why my Child, I have blooded you!"
He cried out his distress.
The nodding Child: "It's pretty sweet too -
So lovely and fresh."
The Father's eyes were wary
So tender was the voice
Was this flirtation, and how dare he!
He made a sudden choice.
"I believe my son, it is the hour."
Regretfully he mused.
"Come back when you're not a Flower:
Of all the things to choose!"
A contest entry
- Can You Ever Get Enough Blood? by Count Orlok.
400 points, ended January 23, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does the poem read more humorously of offensively?
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i am the mother of a gay son and a gay rights activist,,, i love what you wrote,, beautiful,,,
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Wow, this is the BEST damn rhyme I have EVER heard!!!! *Bows before the master* You rock!!!!!
"But my child," he cried
"This is quite a blow!"
The Child sighed:
"I know, I know."
I LOVE this part!!
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meant more for humour than anything else, it isnt my favorite out of mine, but i'm glad it's enjoyable!
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This is really crazy and fun and bloody good- love it!
I really like rhyming for the hell of it and this is a good example of that. Poetry for poetry's sake.
Good stuff!
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I always like a little bit of blasphemy and mockery of the silly Christian faith. But maybe a bit of blood and gore would have improved things....
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ahhhh i got gold!
thank you so much im more chuffed than strictly appropriate, being an online poetry competition on the theme of vampires, but hey, i dont ever win things
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true, i had intended it origonally to relate to S and M, but then it started to rhyme and before i knew it i was full swing in some silly comic farse! i felt if i dragged it on too long with details it would lose its impact, so i cut it short, but maybe i will revise it in the future or make an alternative version. thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
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