Hold me down and hurt me
Tie my hands above my head
A drop of sweat runs down my naked body
Mingled with blood your marks left
Cover me in bruises; mark me as your own
You tell me this is normal
You tell me this is how it happens
You tell me this is love...
I gasp in pain as you claim me
Take me, my form, and my soul
A noise you confuse with pleasure
As your explorations take their toll
My breathing gets more laboured
As the pain gets so much worse
But its ok, i can take it
After all, this is ‘love’
I’m asphyxiated by your dominating body
Covered in your sweat
Hours pass before you stop
When you’ve taken all you can get
Then once more, we are done
I push you off with a shove
You leave me alone, broken and bruised
And weak from your ‘love’
Author notes
Contest entry, number six as inspiration.
not entirely sure this is the direction that this title should've inspired, it may be somewhat dark, but its what i came up with so i hope you enjoy 
A contest entry
- Titles # 3 by cirque du soleil.
525 points, ended February 5, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Powerful imagery.Loved the darkness in here and reminds me of one of my poems"Killing you"
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hey its like a song u can play to packed houses!!!its wonderful the rhythm is excellent...every stanza makes me think and reflect upon it...kudos!!!
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I’m asphyxiated by your dominating body
Covered in your sweat
Hours pass before you stop
When you’ve taken all you can get
Wow..this was totally not was I was expecting…which makes it all the more brilliant… you are the only contestant so far to have looked at the title from this perspective. This poem, I agree, addresses some very real and serious issues..good job…you have been very to-the-point with this one
Thanks for the entry!
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ouch..
this is dark and your words are striking.
even though this isnt what i expected from the title, i like it. in a twisted way.
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In the beginning it sounds like you're the dominating one in the relationship. I thought at first this poem would be about sadism and masochism.
But then it changes to a tone where the speaker is aware that this kind of love is wrong, but now she sounds like a victim of abuse instead.
I was just confused by the different tones in this poem. =/ -
That made me feel sick, that really got my attention thats for sure. At first I thought oh no anouther emo piece, but wow it addresses a very real issue, and you did it well. Exellent piece.
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As it's painful to the touch, this is painful to the read, and you bring this scene to life in such vivid detail...hitting so many of the senses. "Love" is a strange thing. It's a confusing word and taken in so many different ways. You brought that into the light. Excellent writing.
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wow... i really like this.. your very dark..
i think i like this write because thats the way i choose to go with mine also.. honestly..this is amazing..no critisism..at all.. i like the background too..
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