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~ Torn ~

You r-e-a-c-h-e-d

                  into my {{heart}}

took it, (ABUSED) it

                    r
                    i
                    p
                    p
                    e
                    d it out

  left me to ++die++

                  you called that ♥LOVE♥

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  • Lady Michaella
    January 22

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    ooo. this is really gud.
    its so sad.
    im not sure about the setting out, but i do agree, it does help make the words really stand out and have an effect on me.
    good job,
    i really like this.
    x


    • onesugar gold member
      January 22
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      Thank you for the HM and kind words in your comment. I was experimenting on the way I wrote it.
      All the best
      ~sugar~

  • twodie4
    January 22

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    I quite like this from you, I have not seen you do anything like this before, very powerful emotions within this short verse as pretty as it looks. Good luck sug
    All the best
    Emma


    • onesugar gold member
      January 22
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      Just dabbling at different ways of writing
      glad you enjoyed, as always your comments
      are appreciated.
      ~sugar~