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Just Because~

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Just because,

 

My lips of ruby wine once laid playfully on yours,

and emerald eyes erased heartaches momentarily.

 

While my silken flesh shelters my inner sanctum,

I chose to bestow upon you, your own river of dreams,

awaiting my own to inhale, so that I may breathe.

 

Of-course I knew you would fall deeply for my facades,

just as jet hair spirals sensually past soft shoulders.

I can feel the touch of your eyes tracing each curve.

 

You're intoxicated with scents of nectar deceits,

resembling stringed puppets I often manipulate,

you ignite easily, within one glance to your gaze,

but drench whatever passion is left inside lustful flames.

 

For I’m way beyond reach, as I fade like a sunset,

you’re just another bracelet around my wanton wrist.

 

Sounds calloused, though I blossom like a rose of thorns,

syringes of poisonous pang, taint each teardrop.

 

You taste venom spewed into your innocent tongue,

you'll remain a victim of what you thought love was.

 

And live a daily dose of insignificant dreams.

 

Just because…

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Photo Promt: (flowers_by_daimonia)

From her view, doing what she may, or what she must.

Just because....

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  • loveangerbeauty
    January 30

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    this is really beautiful, i love the way this depicts the girl as poisonous yet sensual. the imagery is amazing and i really love it! i can relate on some level, too. not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing tho, lol.


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    January 30

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    how beautiful...! i love the imagery and strong passion in this..it gives the reader a moment to reflect on their own anxiety within relationships....
    amazing...!


    hugggss
    becca


  • echo-ink
    January 29

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    Owwwhhhhhhhwowzer,

    This was dreamy, full of metaphors and just beautiful.
    Desire mixed with devilish warnings,
    I loved this,


  • schoolsable
    January 29
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    this is beautiful. very thoughtful and intriging. Its passionate and i really like. great job


  • il terzo fratello
    January 29

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    Love how you opened and closed with the title. Very beautiful and very creative. The passionate words of love almost jump of the page while reading this, and makes one think of their own struggles. I loved it! Great write.

  • patrick20traveler
    January 29

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    This is in intriguing and thought provoking poem; some of it I couldn’t really understand, but I’m getting old and way past feelings of passionate love. I recall that most relationships had some degree of tension, but this creature aroused high anxiety.


  • june0
    January 29

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    Good write, I love some of the lines within this poem.
    For instance:

    For I’m way beyond reach, as I fade like a sunset,

    My lips of ruby wine once laid playfully on yours,

    While my silken flesh shelters my inner sanctum,

    I chose to bestow upon you, your own river of dreams,




  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    January 29

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    Brilliant!!!

    There's not much to say that hasn't already been said by the other poets. I always admire your creativity and I wish you all the best, always.
    &
    xx Cyn xx


  • Winged Unicorn
    January 29

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    Wow

    A really strange but beautiful poem. I love how you used the prompt it works really well. This poem really speaks to me and laughably bought to mind a friend I once had who i often thought of as a man eater and this poem describes her to a T. I like the tone and the words used "though i blossom like a rose of thorns" is simply magnificent. Again very good write


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    January 29

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    This reminds me of what and how a black widow spider might speak of her folly.
    Lure them to her snare and wrap them all up. Just because... she's hungry.
    I echo the sentiments of all those that have read here before me. Sensational also comes to mind!
    Rap on brother...
    Play on drummer...


  • Angelflower
    January 29

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    hmm, now what to say to something this beautiful and strong.. there was a softness about your words and yet there was a certain intensity as well.. I love the whole.. "just as jet hair spirals sensually past soft shoulders." lol.. you really did such a wonderful job with that picture.. for some reason it reminds me a lot of home.. anyway thank you very much for sharing. best of luck in the contest.

    Angel


  • poeticpieces
    January 27
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    Flawless!


  • 245Trioxin
    January 26

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    I love the use of 'just because' as your final line.

    Nothing could sum it up better than the intent of that. It's important to know that it wasn't a playful mishap, or 'we just fell out of love" sort of thing, but an intentional misdirection, a cowardly veil of deceit, a rouse if you will... like any good villian in a film that reveals his /her plot in the end.

    Saying 'Just because' is the ultimate slap in the face.

    It means you were always meaningless.

    (Sorry it took so long, I'd log in and then have to hop off or do something else... hectic week).

    A truly Bravo bit of authoring


  • campanaro silver member
    January 26
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    Superb!

    What a beautiful poem..
    Very talented writer!
    Love Peace,
    campanaro

  • imahealer
    January 25

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    Strong and DArk!

    I HAVE MISSED READING THE WORKS OF THE MASTER POET! AFTER HAVING BEEN GONE FOR ALMOST 6 MONTHS, I KNOW THAT YOUR WORDS WILL INSPIRE ME TO GET BACK ON THE TRAIN. METAPHORS ARE ABSOLUTELY INCREDIBLE.
    EACH COUPLET IS BETTER THAN THE NEXT. HAVE MISSED YOU, MY FRIEND.


    LInda


  • Lonely
    January 25

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    Dark.. So beautifully bitter! I loved this one Tim.. I wonder how you manage to weave such masterpieces in every genre! No wonder why you are known as the master! I liked the stanza:
    "You're intoxicated with scents of nectar deceits,
    resembling stringed puppets I often manipulate,
    you ignite easily, within one glance to your gaze,
    but drench whatever passion is left inside lustful flames."

    It speaks out. Wonderfully done honey!

    Love ya forever
    Wifey


  • Mariana gold member
    January 24

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    'For I’m way beyond reach, as I fade like a sunset,
    you’re just another bracelet around my wanton wrist.'

    Intoxicating and yet bitter...full of amazing imagery. Well written...well done!

    Mariana


  • Desire gold member
    January 23

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    Wow~

    Powerful piece You have penned my Friend and Love how You presented this~
    Excellent!!! The emotions also energy brought forth tugs hard at the Heartstrings
    Bravo!!! You took the picture and delivered to the highest level

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Voice~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Lady Michaella
    January 23

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    wow!!!_!!!
    this is amazing! your imagery here is stunning. wow.
    you brought alive every single image in my mind as i read this, and that hardly ever happens when i read a poem. i really wasn't expecting the ending, but that completely summed it up and ended it. it was a very final ending. some poems i read, the ending is just boring and plain and in finale, but this is excellent, and keeps me thinking about it. i love this poem, i love the idea of it and i love the way it is written. a truly amazing write right here.
    thanks for sharing this.
    xx


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    January 23

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    Very Sensual and so very soft
    You have done an amazing piece, from "her" point of view
    Ticks all the boxes
    AWESOME !


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    January 23

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    You taste venom spewed into your innocent tongue,
    you'll remain a victim of what you thought love was.

    i absolutely thought that line was brilliant. as always, you amaze me. thank you for sharing your awesome talent with me again and i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie



  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    January 23

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    amazing how you've managed sensuality in this piece esp you wrote it in 'her' point of view

    no asking why
    just like you're title
    just because...you're good


    Fly Shy


  • Sacred Ground
    January 23

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    Nice write... In fact,your outlook on the take is absolutely stunning. You never cease to amaze me in some shape, form, or fashion, thats for sure! My favorite lines in this write are:
    for I am way beyond reach, as I fade like a sunset,
    You're just another bracelet around my wanton's wrist.
    To me, these lines are what made the poem. Awesome, my friend!

    ~S~G~


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    January 23

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, with just the right touch of sensuality. You always seem to express your ideas quite clearly. Thanks for sharing.


  • elinawilfred
    January 23
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    emotion overflowing.

    a good poem, actually a great work.
    love


  • elinawilfred
    January 23
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    emotion overflowing.

    a good poem, actually a great work.
    love

  • twodie4
    January 23

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    Amazing take on the prompt, the emotions jusmp out as you read along. Wonderful writing that has been done well.
    All the best
    Emma


  • Jalalbad gold member
    January 22

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    I love this poem just because you wrote it poeticweaver. Good luck in the contest


  • Alive4aLiving
    January 22

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    I love your take one the image, absolutely beautiful... I have met women like this to, and they always seem oh so heartless to the men that chase after them

  • LovingPhoenix
    January 22
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    I love everything you write! Good luck!


  • Angels hero
    January 22

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    This poem is outstanding. You have taken words and expressed them beautifully. This poem is defineatly up to your standards. Keep up the good work. Good luck with the contest!!!


  • StarEyes
    January 22

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    Wow! This is great! I love your take on the picture! What a great job you did on this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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