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My Beloved Says:

My Beloved Says:

The shower of your love, I seek

As the drops of rain pour on the thirsty ground,

Making it wet, smiling and lively,

By quenching its thirst!

Same is case with the drops of your love

That can make the ground of my clean body

Wet, smiling and white!

Pain is the beauty of unfulfilled desires,

Which I suffer from during the course of love-making

But do not consider my cries as reluctance;

Rather, it is the deep expression of my love for you!

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  • twentytwenty
    January 22
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    very romantic

    very romantic and lovely poem dear mujtaba hehehehe