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Lost and Found

I lost you somewhere
in "I love you,"
but when I
turned around
you were there.

Author notes

Just some words that got lost this weekend.

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  • deercatcher
    March 16

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    Words are fine; just sparse... A lot implied. This is a seed poem. I see a struggle between expectation, which limits and disappoints, and expectancy, which prepares a heart for gratitude.


    • kjack
      March 17
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment on this poem. I appreciate it more than I can say. I usually don't write poems this short, but it was originally for a contest for poems of 16 words or less. It was based on a real situation though. Thanks so much again for your wonderful comment.

      becca


  • Twins 4 me
    January 22
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    Very well expressed piece. Great job and good luck!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    January 22

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    -Hugs-

    This seems to have a story behind it sweet sis.
    Know you are loved, and thanks for sharing you.

    Love bro Timothy.