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HM- Hidden in a Sea

Missing image
Hidden in a sea of deceit and lies,
purging yourself of family in hopes of getting high.
What're you trying to achieve,
all the while your mother and children grieve?

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http://inebriantia.deviantart.com/art/The-Infinity-Fountain-52922968

lol mad at my sister right now can ya tell idiot ran away friday aint been seen but we keeping track though lol we're spies hehe

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  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    August 1

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    Well Done!

    Sure hope all's well now with Sis! Fine concise write about a painful subject that I'm sure many can identify with. Glad you won that HM!


  • creationsfromheart
    July 23
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    this is very strong for such a few words nice rhyme as well


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    July 9

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    excellent

    Penned well but so sad
    Hope you do find your sister...bless your heart
    I just penned a new one drop by when ya can
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • spanishrose
    June 7

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    powerful

    I gets me a thinking what went wrong. I like it is a very poerful poem for me to read. Thank you for sharing it with me. May your words keep floating like a swan on a lake.


  • Knight70
    May 31

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    profoundly written...

    I've missed your work, Cara. I'm glad I have a new computer now. My last one crashed, and I went a year before I could get another one. This piece reminds just how powerful an addiction can be. It has the capacity to destroy the closest of families. I pray that it works out in the long run.

    Don


  • liltulip gold member
    March 18
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    hope all is well

    intense write, thank you for sharing it with us


  • Maxboy gold member
    January 22

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    Such a sad subject sweetie, but your write was well done.

    Best Wishes


  • Jesann gold member
    January 22

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    Very sad...esp when adding your AN to the poem.
    A lot of emotion expressed here.
    Very well done.


  • maralisa silver member
    January 22
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    aw this so deep and powerful good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • rbruce gold member
    January 22
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    Very good, very sad that such things happen.


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    January 22

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    Sorry to hear sweetie... My brother ran away from home last year, so I know how it must feel for you and your family. I will hope for her safe return.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    January 22

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    this brings back memories, of a place I was once ten years ago. It's not a pleasant place to be. I can feel the emotions as I read this. its real & filled with raw truth.

    excellent take on the prompt & Outstanding poem

    good luck
    kat


  • Ademon
    January 22
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    It's good and sad, best wishes in the contest.


  • creationsfromheart
    January 22

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    Aw I know where this came from straight from your lil Heart Hugsssssssssssssssssssss you much

  • creationsfromheart
    January 21
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    HI Chicky boo Hugsss

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