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Still Waiting

Pushing, fading away...
tide catches hold.
Shadows caress emptiness,
emotions washed away.

Light adorns the silence,
golden trickery-
is it right to feel so alone?
I am.

And still waiting...

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  • thechairman
    January 22
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    dark and brooding, (PS - Enjoyed) have a good weekend , friend,


  • Jesann gold member
    January 22

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    Oh this is rather sad, but very well written.
    "Shadows caress emptiness"
    Great imagery, well done.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    January 22

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    I love your take on the prompt! Not what one would expect, but well-penned nonetheless. Good luck to you in the contest!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    January 22

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    the emotions within this poem are very relatable for me. this was a place that I was at one time, a place I do visit often. this is how I feel when I think of my family.. I'm still waiting for my mom to accept me, though it will never happen. I've accepted that..

    excellent take on the prompt.

    good luck
    kat


  • creationsfromheart
    January 22

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    This makes one feels such a sadness wen reading very nice write. I like how I can feel the pain as i read it,

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